Question

能帮我改改这篇英语作文吗，，极其的感谢~~~

Dear dad: As the Thanksgiving Days is coming, through all my life, I supposed you must be the first man I ought to express my gratitude.

Not only did you so much for me in material but also in psychology. Due to my silent character, in spite of I wanted to express some genuine statement of heartfelt appreciation to you, I have never bothered you just with a "thank you".

Dad, do you still remember? Once you wanted to teach me something in volunteer work, whereas I just taken your idea for rather firm and useless. Although I did not straightforward evaluate you concept, you still felt my aversion and draw a conclusion that I'm flashy. I was sad and angry at that moment, deciding not communicate with you any more. As time flying, I can slowly arrive at the highly state that you wish. Only you can tell me something about that, regardless of my reluctant. I love you.

Your lovely daughter

Answer 1

1， Dear dad: As the Thanksgiving Days is coming, I think you must be the first man through all my life I ought to express my gratitude.

You did so much for me not only in material but also in psychology. Due to my silent character, I have never bothered you even with a "thank you" in spite of my willingness to express my heartily appreciation to you.

Dad, do you still remember that? Once you wanted to teach me something in volunteer work, whereas I just took your idea for rather firm and useless. Although I did not straightforwardly evaluate you concept, you still felt my aversion and draw a conclusion that I was flashy. I was sad and angry at that moment, deciding not to talk to you any more. As time flying, I am slowly approaching to the high state that you expected. Only you can teach me something about that regardless of my reluctance. I love you.

Your lovely daughter

2， Dear dad: As the Thanksgiving Days is coming, I think you must be the first man through all my life I ought to express my gratitude.

You did so much for me not only in material but also in psychology. Due to my silent character, I have never bothered you even with a "thank you" in spite of my willingness to express my heartily appreciation to you.

Dad, do you still remember that? Once you wanted to teach me something in volunteer work, whereas I just took your idea for rather firm and useless. Although I did not straightforwardly evaluate you concept, you still felt my aversion and draw a conclusion that I was flashy. I was sad and angry at that moment, deciding not to talk to you any more. As time flying, I am slowly approaching to the high state that you expected. Only you can teach me something about that regardless of my reluctance. I love you.

Answer 2

Dear dad: As the Thanksgiving Days is coming, through all my life, I think you must be the first man I ought to express my gratitude.

You did so much for me not only in material but also in psychology. Due to my silent character, in spite of my willingness to express some genuine statement of heartfelt appreciation to you, I have never bothered you even with a "thank you".

Dad, do you still remember that? Once you wanted to teach me something in volunteer work, whereas I just took your idea for rather firm and useless. Although I did not straightforwardly evaluate you concept, you still felt my aversion and draw a conclusion that I was flashy. I was sad and angry at that moment, deciding not communicate with you any more. As time flying, I can slowly arrive at the highly state that you expected. Only you can tell me something about that, regardless of my reluctance. I love you.

Your lovely daughter (只是纠正了部分语法问题，句子内容和结构都没改）

追问

能再帮我提升一下句式吗，，嘿嘿~~

追答

Dear dad: As the Thanksgiving Days is coming, I think you must be the first man through all my life I ought to express my gratitude.

You did so much for me not only in material but also in psychology. Due to my silent character, I have never bothered you even with a "thank you" in spite of my willingness to express my heartily appreciation to you.

Dad, do you still remember that? Once you wanted to teach me something in volunteer work, whereas I just took your idea for rather firm and useless. Although I did not straightforwardly evaluate you concept, you still felt my aversion and draw a conclusion that I was flashy. I was sad and angry at that moment, deciding not to talk to you any more. As time flying, I am slowly approaching to the high state that you expected. Only you can teach me something about that regardless of my reluctance. I love you.

Your lovely daughter
我觉得都挺好的，但是，这个是写给父亲的，所以有的句式不用写太复杂。不过，只要是真心的表达，都很好，父亲会感受到的。

Answer 3

Dear dad: As the Thanksgiving Days is coming, I think you must be the first man through all my life I ought to express my gratitude.

You did so much for me not only in material but also in psychology. Due to my silent character, I have never bothered you even with a "thank you" in spite of my willingness to express my heartily appreciation to you.

Dad, do you still remember that? Once you wanted to teach me something in volunteer work, whereas I just took your idea for rather firm and useless. Although I did not straightforwardly evaluate you concept, you still felt my aversion and draw a conclusion that I was flashy. I was sad and angry at that moment, deciding not to talk to you any more. As time flying, I am slowly approaching to the high state that you expected. Only you can teach me something about that regardless of my reluctance. I love you.