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英语高手来！！！在线等！！

英语不及格，时态语态以及句子成分混乱的我在没称自己的斤两的情况下，写了个【三寸天堂】的英文版歌词。。。写完了才发现，我不知道有没有语法错误。。。反正word里头好多小红杠小绿杠的，我瞪着眼都是不知道怎么改。。。于是，求助各位高人。。。帮我改改吧！！！！！在线等啊！！！
然后，要求是不能增加字数，因为我是按照音乐节拍写的，增加字数的话就没法唱了。但是可以适当减少字数。然后，内容就这样吧，主要帮我改改语法错误。总之，谢过大神们了！！
【Withered Rose】
stay in here I afraid go away
don't want to let sorrow continue
I find that you wrote down good-bye in there
the last page of my diary
in my world you are go by too hurry
I always hug with untruthful you
our love just like a withered rose
sorrowful poem in winter
no more look the sunshine we ever look together
no more think paredise we ever wanna
no more sigh why couldn't we go back to before
your sunshine is away from me
...（重复以上）
no longer say any prayer for you

Answer 1

我是来做任务的

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。。。。我真的很着急。。。刚看到有回复，激动了下。。额，原来，是百度任务君啊。。。。555555555555555555555

追答

好吧 我帮你看看吧 怎么说也是英语专业的

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拜托您了！！！在线等，我越快录出来越好。对方喜欢听三寸天堂，就是没听过英文版的，于是我这个英文苦手就不得不自己动手了。。。唉。。。总之，靠您了！ps：一定要看好要求昂~我英语真的好差，而且我目前高三，于是四级六级词汇什么的，能不要写就最后不要写了昂，你懂。。。再次感谢，万分感谢！！！

追答

stay in here I‘m afraid to go away
don't want to let sorrow continue
I find that you wrote down good-bye in there
the last page of my diary
in my world you are going by too hurry
I always hug with untruthful you
our love’s just like a withered rose
sorrowful poem in winter
no more seeing the sunshine we ever saw together
no more thinking paredise we ever wanna
no more sighing why couldn't we go back to before
your sunshine is away from me
...（重复以上）
no longer saying any prayer for you
刚帮你改了下没提交成功 纠结 这下在原题上帮你改的 仔细看看 见谅

Answer 2

看着有些押韵哦

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所以。。。您给改改呗。。。。