Question

一篇英语小作文。大家给看看。找找毛病。。我英语很烂。马上要考试了。急啊。最好明天之前。。。

Good afternoon,ladies and gentlemen,my dear teachers and grduates.
It is a great honor for me to stand here and make a speech.
At first I want to in memory of my school,when I was 15year old ,I came to the middle school.There were many flowers and birds ,Every teacher were kindness,The class was so interesting that students listened attentive Besides I got along well with my schoolmates.
Then I want to say :Dear teacher ,You tought me knowledge. I never forgot it ,Dear mom,If without you supported me ,I could not stand here. Dear schoolmates Thank you for your helped
Finally I wish we have a good future and a wonderful physical.
Thank you for listening.

Answer 1

At first I want to in memory of my school中in memory of用错，它不是动词，我看可以用recall代替。15year old改为15 years old或者15-year-old。Every teacher were kindness应为was kind。注意kingness是不能接在be动词的后面的名词。 listened attentive 应为all focused on it。If without you supported me可以去掉me并且把supported去掉d，you改为your。Thank you for your helped中把helped改成help或者helping，for后面接动名词或者名词。wonderful physical不好，改成strong body。或有错误，尽请原谅。

Answer 2

honor____honorable
when I was 15year old ——when I was 15-year-old
There were many flowers and birds___There were many fiowers and birds in it
Every teacher were kindness____Every teacher was kind
,The class was so interesting that students listened attentive Besides I got along well with my schoolmates._____There class was so interesting that students listened carefully. （这里你打的有问题？我给你个比较合理的回答）And I also got on well with my schoolmates.
,You tought me knowledge._____You taught me knowledge
I never forgot it ______I never forget it
,If without you supported me ,I could not stand here. ____If without your support ,I would not stand here.
Dear schoolmates Thank you for your helped———— Dear schoolmates Thank you for your help.
Finally I wish we have a good future and a wonderful physical______Finally I wish we will have good future and a wonderful physical(？这是“物理的，身体的”的意思，我没明白？）
这篇文章。。。。不是特别好。。。不过考试得个中等分还差不多

追问

靠谱~~谢谢...
关于写作文，再让分得的高一点，请问还有什么好的建议没？？

追答

你最好多看看一些特殊句式 我给你几个：
It is(强调部分）that(原句照抄）（注意，此时去掉It is that 句子仍然成立）
It is(原句剩余）that（你要加的主语）
（原来的内容）+that/which+你想给所修饰词语的修饰词

Answer 3

Good afternoon,dear teachers and students:
I 'm especially proud because i am standing here and makeing a speech.
At first, I am thinking of a memory of my school x years ago.when I was 15 years old ,I came to the middle school.There were many flowers and birds .Every teacher was kindness.The classes were so intersting that students were absorbed in listening,What`s more,i got along well with my schoolmates.
Second,Dear teachers ,You tought me knowledge. I never forgot it .Dear mom,I wouldn't have been able to stand here this far in the sport l love withut you. Dear schoolmates, Thank you for your help.
Finally I wish we have a good future and a wonderful physical.
Thank you for listening.
你错这堆东西啊 ，都快从写一篇了

追问

谢谢大仙，受益匪浅啊。我英语单词背了不少。就是不会用啊。也不敢。害怕出错。怎么办啊

追答

基本都给你改好了。。。。20分钟额
背单词，把例句也看看，基本一个类型的词用法都差不多的

追问

他们都答得不错，你也很好。分就一个。这样吧。我随便提个问题，你去答好了。这样都有了。顺便想拜你为师~~~

追答

E........................................行

追问

你倒不谦虚~。
http://zhidao.baidu.com/question/358070184.html?oldq=1

你去吧。顺便问一下你QQ，不会是用户名吧

追答

发你百度邮箱了

Answer 4

Good afternoon,ladies and gentlemen.It is a great honor for me to stand here and make a speech.
At first I want to in memory of my school.When I was 15 year old ,I came to the middle school.There were many flowers and birds ,Every teacher was kindness.The class was so interesting that students listened attentive. Besides I got along well with my schoolmates.
Then I want to say :Dear teacher ,You tought me knowledge. I never forgot it ,Dear mom,without your support ,I could not stand here. Dear schoolmates,thank you for your help.
Finally I wish we will have a good future and a wonderful physical.
Thank you for listening.

追问

复制一遍有用么!!!？？？？
边去

追答

有时是可以的，比如谓语间有and连接，或者是从句。

Answer 5

Very good .

追问

谢。可是我认为还是有很多错误。比如过去式之类的。问一句。一句话里有两个过去式可以么？？记得初中讲得好像不可以。还是什么情况下不可以啊？？