Question

请帮忙看一下我写的这段英语有没有语法错误。谢谢！！！

题目： Tell me about your city
Well as you can probably guess I come from Harbin and I lived here all my life. In fact, I never leave my hometown except travel. I suppose if I had to describe Harbin, the first thing I would say is that the weather of winter is absolutely cold and the summer always cool but too short. Maybe even it has the lowest average temperature among all of the Chinese provincial capitals I guess. It’s so cold that the Songhua River which goes through our city will freeze about five months. But another point I could add is that thanks to the winter, it makes my hometown famous for ice and snow. The government builds ice engraving and snow sculpture to establish a large-scale amusement park in order to attract tourists. And I shouldn’t forget to mention that one of my hometown’s significant characteristic is that Russian and Japanese architectures and cobblestone streets. Actually, it is hardly to see at other cities.

Answer 1

第一行：lived可以考虑改成have been living
第二行：had to describe可以改成have to describe
第三行：可以考虑把the weather of 去掉，直接改成 the winter is absolutely cold and the summer is always cool but too short here.
第四行：可以考虑不要I guess，因为句头已经有maybe了
倒数第二行的that Russian的that后面应该接一个完整的句子，不然也可以直接用the Russian and Japanese..
最后一行：in other cities
希望有用~

Answer 2

1.时态好像有些问题：如lived应该用一般现在时live吧；
2.主谓搭配：the summer always cool 应为the summer is always cool ；
3.介词搭配：最后一句at other cities应为in other cities;
4.没必要用那么多的表语从句，可用些简单句，更明了；
其他的好像好OK!

Answer 3

我觉得这写的有错误，比如时态的问题，是些小问题，可以避免的，大的问题好像没看到。。。希望注意点。。

Answer 4

1.I have to describe
2.summer后加is
3.even 去掉
4.倒数第二行去掉that

Answer 5

有错误，比如 the summer always 与 cool 之间要加 is 后面是复数的 （characteristic is） 要改 最后一句也不多。。。。。，

追问

谢谢，前面两个指出的错误看懂了，最后一个“最后一句也不多。。。”是什么？是整句话有问题吗？

追答

啊 是最后一句也不对 打错了。。 如果按原句改的话，应是 They are hardly to be seen in other cities. 读起来有些地方很bie， 不要刻意去套用句型， 叙述通顺自然就好。

Answer 6

第二句had应该为原型，