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The killer used a piece of rope with a hook in the middle to coil the victim’s neck
and hung it on the roof. coil around victim’s neck...(因为是围着) and pulled the rest of the rope through the o pulleys on the roof. (应是将"其余"的绳穿过天花板上的滑轮~ 就这样"挂上天花板"比较难理解/图像化~ 另~由于是指明天花板上"那两个"滑轮~所以第一次提及也可用the o pulleys~) A string at the other side tied some plastic buckets together and the killer had poured water into those buckets before he left. The other end of the rope... (用开rope就继续用~string多指较幼的线~ 绳的另一头用end多于用side~因side有"平面"的意思~) was tied to some plastic buckets and... (was tied 是因为绳不会自己缚自己~是被动的~ together就不用了~不必刻意强调"缚在一起"~) the killer put a water pipe with water flowing out into one of the buckets before he left. (因为他不是倒水~而是放入水喉慢慢加水~才能做成不在场杀人的效果嘛~ 而且一条水管只能为其中一个桶加水~ 另外不必强调"已经"加了水/放入水管~所以不用perfect tense较好~) The string started to pull up the victim when the buckets became heavier and heavier. The victim may have dead before his body was pulled up. The rope started to pull the victim up... (pull *** . up 较正式) the bucket...(如上文只有一桶加水那只有一个桶变重~) may have been dead / may have died...(dead是 adj.) 最后一句同上~ had been dead / had died. 这次文法上比较少错误呢~~Congrats~~ 图片参考：l.yimg/f/iugc/rte/ *** iley_4 主要是表达的要更清晰些~ (不过那幅图本来就很难表达~~=P) Hope this helps~~ 图片参考：l.yimg/f/iugc/rte/ *** iley_1