修改一篇英文小作文,是一篇很短的英语演讲稿
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楼主,恕我直言,文章语法错误和用词错误比较多,我本来打算把每个修改的地方再复述下错误原因等,但我发现太多了.我大概谈下主要错误吧
1.句子成分问题,每个句子只能有一个谓语动词,连接2个句子用连词,若并列关系还可以用分号.在句子成分这个方面,楼主问题最多
2.用代词指代everyone, every body的所属格时,用 his or her 或者 his/her ,不能用its
3.先问好,再说ladies and gengtle,习惯问题
4.注意谓语动词单复数形式
5.Olympic Games 不加冠词 the
以下我修改好了的,你自己看吧
Good afternoon,Ladies and Gentlemen!
As we all know, Beijing will hold Olympic Games in 2008, and everybody is eager to look forward to it. Carefully observing the life in detail, we can easily see that the Olympic spirit is pervasive.
Neighbors help each other; colleagues, in spite of petition, are aware that the friendship es first. Everyone has started to protect his or her surrounding environment. Olympic atmosphere is diffused to my home as well----parents pay great attention to the information of the Olympic Games, and all brothers and sisters take turns to talk about the various stories related to Olympic Games.
Everyone has his or her own expectation about Olympic Games, and I also believe that China will certainly be able to better organize Olympic Games and win honor for our country !
I am proud of being a Chinese. I hope my country to be much stronger. I look forward to 2008, and I will say to the world aloud: Wele to Beijing.
Good Luck to 2008 Beijing Olympic Games
That's all. Thanks for your listening.
1.句子成分问题,每个句子只能有一个谓语动词,连接2个句子用连词,若并列关系还可以用分号.在句子成分这个方面,楼主问题最多
2.用代词指代everyone, every body的所属格时,用 his or her 或者 his/her ,不能用its
3.先问好,再说ladies and gengtle,习惯问题
4.注意谓语动词单复数形式
5.Olympic Games 不加冠词 the
以下我修改好了的,你自己看吧
Good afternoon,Ladies and Gentlemen!
As we all know, Beijing will hold Olympic Games in 2008, and everybody is eager to look forward to it. Carefully observing the life in detail, we can easily see that the Olympic spirit is pervasive.
Neighbors help each other; colleagues, in spite of petition, are aware that the friendship es first. Everyone has started to protect his or her surrounding environment. Olympic atmosphere is diffused to my home as well----parents pay great attention to the information of the Olympic Games, and all brothers and sisters take turns to talk about the various stories related to Olympic Games.
Everyone has his or her own expectation about Olympic Games, and I also believe that China will certainly be able to better organize Olympic Games and win honor for our country !
I am proud of being a Chinese. I hope my country to be much stronger. I look forward to 2008, and I will say to the world aloud: Wele to Beijing.
Good Luck to 2008 Beijing Olympic Games
That's all. Thanks for your listening.
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