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Somepeoplearguethatteachingchildrenofdifferentabilitiestogetherbenefitsallofthem.Othe...
Some people argue that teaching children of different abilities together benefits all of them. Others believe that intelligent children should be taught separately and given special treatment.
Discuss both view and how do you think about it ?
In the past decades,schooling and parenting had increasingly attracted attention by many members of public.With the educational development ,we find that part of children had inherent advantage of some exceptional area such as sports,science and so on.Therefore, in terms of offspring’s education,whether we should teach children a wide range of knowledge or teach special skills for intelligent children in some extraordinary ways.Should we separate this?
Apparently, children tend to, in contemporary society, acquire a variety of knowledge as this concept sweeps trend of education, which induce a large proportion of parents to send their children to normally school. It is not bad indeed. The competition, in the fast development age, is increasing stiff. There is no denying that getting distinct kinds of knowledge could enable descendants become rather competitive, which increases their employment opportunities. However, it means that ‘specialist pupil’would become generally during this period as well.
(这段之间的连接词我不知道用By contrast合适不。因为两者之间似乎没有比较啊。第三段的开头，我似乎不知道怎么写了。后面有思路，就是不知道怎么开头了。)
By contrast, the life of children will be monotonous and unmotivated，provided that professional training school were established in order to cultivate children’s special skills,e.g.,Soccer Training School, Acting School,etc. Even though these unusual treatments likely survial for specials and could bring about a host of wonderful incident, of course, inclusion affluent, status, reputation as well.Whereas the yong people indeed lost lots of what they reallt want it.
To conclude, I firmly sanction that the happiness of juvenile should be given priority to consider that mens society and family should not make children live in a massive pressure circumstance. Besides, combination these two of educational methodologies is the most(best?) suitable for children development.
PS：因为考前不再找老师了，自己看不出什么错误，求帮忙
鄙人2月18日 3战雅思
头两次均是5分
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Discuss both view and how do you think about it ?
In the past decades,schooling and parenting had increasingly attracted attention by many members of public.With the educational development ,we find that part of children had inherent advantage of some exceptional area such as sports,science and so on.Therefore, in terms of offspring’s education,whether we should teach children a wide range of knowledge or teach special skills for intelligent children in some extraordinary ways.Should we separate this?
Apparently, children tend to, in contemporary society, acquire a variety of knowledge as this concept sweeps trend of education, which induce a large proportion of parents to send their children to normally school. It is not bad indeed. The competition, in the fast development age, is increasing stiff. There is no denying that getting distinct kinds of knowledge could enable descendants become rather competitive, which increases their employment opportunities. However, it means that ‘specialist pupil’would become generally during this period as well.
(这段之间的连接词我不知道用By contrast合适不。因为两者之间似乎没有比较啊。第三段的开头，我似乎不知道怎么写了。后面有思路，就是不知道怎么开头了。)
By contrast, the life of children will be monotonous and unmotivated，provided that professional training school were established in order to cultivate children’s special skills,e.g.,Soccer Training School, Acting School,etc. Even though these unusual treatments likely survial for specials and could bring about a host of wonderful incident, of course, inclusion affluent, status, reputation as well.Whereas the yong people indeed lost lots of what they reallt want it.
To conclude, I firmly sanction that the happiness of juvenile should be given priority to consider that mens society and family should not make children live in a massive pressure circumstance. Besides, combination these two of educational methodologies is the most(best?) suitable for children development.
PS：因为考前不再找老师了，自己看不出什么错误，求帮忙
鄙人2月18日 3战雅思
头两次均是5分
349212306@QQ.com 展开
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