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假设你是李华。在一位叫TigerMom的学生家长的博客上，你看到如下内容。请你根据博客内容。写作要点要求...

假设你是李华。在一位叫TigerMom的学生家长的博客上，你看到如下内容。请你根据博客内容。写作要点要求，给这位家长回复。 lam the mother of a fourteen year old .l have a rule fo
(1/2)for my daughter :be among the top 5 studets or get punished in one way or another .she has been doing very well in school ,but some friend of mine keep t(2/2)elling me that l put too much pressure on her . Am l wrong?

Answer 1

【优秀范文】
One possible version:
Hi, TigerMom,
What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China. My idea is that it is not quite right for you to do so.
Although high grades are an important factor in evaluating students and for their future university admission, development in wisdom, emotion, health, and life attitude should never be ignored. There are many examples around us. Some straight-A students in school have turned out not to be successful in society as they were expected. Thereason is often that the pressure from their parents allows them almost no time for other activities. Furthermore, punishment is by no means a wise choice to help them grow up mentally and physically.
So I suggest that you take your friends’ advice. More importantly, let her live like a lovely girl; let her have more friends and social activities; and let her make mistakes of her own as we teenagers often do.
【亮点回放】范文结构准确，题材题材符合试题中的要求，内容要点齐全，尤其是先对于现象进行了由针对性的分析，然后提出了行之有效的解决办法，并按照材料的要求提出了两点以上的建议，很好的完成了试题的要求，并且使用了一些较高级的词汇和较复杂的结构，过渡性词汇的使用准确，行文连贯，由很强的逻辑性。

Answer 2

As far as t am concerned,I think that the views of the mother's friends are right.
I can understand the mother's thought that she hope her daughter became better.But she does not know her daughter's idear.As a child,she should have a happy childhood.It is a pity that I can imagine the girl 's child must be filled with books and courses.If you were the girl,are you happy?The socity is competitive.Even so,I still tingk the girl's load is too much!One of the prime minister of Japan said that Wang Xizhi hurt many children.Why?Because many children were forced to learen calligraphy by their parents.The happy childhood flies away.
I have some advice for the parents like the mother.The first is that parents can take their children to travel.I believe the children can learn more from a trip than from a book.The second is that parens can be strict with their children,but don't put too much stress on the children.After all,they sre just children!

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