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一篇我自己写的英语作文 我怕语法不对 所以来问问 请高手帮忙修改 谢谢了！文章在下面

Dear Uncle Huang,
Thank you for reading mu E-mail !
I know the children who are living in the local community are lonely. They don't have any brothers, sisters or friends. I want to help them out, so I will give some advice for you:
First, I think let them join the Youth Club is a good way to help them because they can take part in lots of interesting activities such as holiday camps, parties and holiday camps. Second, maybe you can set up a place for playing and chatting. If you do that, the children won't be lonely anymore. Third, you are supposed to organize the children to clean up our town. They will find rich experience.
I hope the children will be happy in the future.
Best wishes!
Yours truly,
Jian Hua

Answer 1

Dear Uncle Huang,
Thank you for reading mu(me) E-mail !
I know the children who are living in the local community are lonely. They don't have any brothers, sisters or friends. I want to help them out, so I will give some advice for(to) you:
First, I think let (letting)them join the Youth Club is a good way to help them because they can take part in lots of interesting activities such as holiday camps, parties and holiday camps. Second, maybe you can set (fix)up a place for playing and chatting. If you do that, the children won't be lonely anymore. Third, you are supposed to organize the children to clean up our town. They will find(get) rich experience.
I hope the children will be happy in the future.
Best wishes!
Yours truly,
Jian Hua

Answer 2

mu改my,for 改to或者写成I will give yousome advice.客气一点可以说Here is my advice. let 改letting, holiday camps重复了, find改get. Yours truly,
Jian Hua不要放在中间。

Answer 3

advice应用复数 anymore译为不再时是分开的，应为any more，其他就没什么了，加油哦

Answer 4

那个是不是打错了，应该是my E-mail 吧~~~
还有such as holiday camps, parties and holiday camps. 这里又打重复了、