Question

请问哪位英语达人能帮我修改一下本人写的小文？不胜感激！

Festival
Togo also has many traditional festival, such us ‘Wrestling quarter’, ‘hunting Festival’. They both have some special Africa style. But the most important’ s festival is ‘Wrestling quarter’. At that time, all the people enter, they knock the drum, dance happily until a week. ‘Wrestling quarter’ was a party for a tribe, but now, it become a festival in the own country.

Culture
In August,20th,2010,Togo had their national museum day in the Shanghai World Expo. In the museum, you can see the traditional architectural style. Here had many culture handicraft, such us the carpet in Togo local ,some special mask and interesting sculpture.

麻烦大家帮忙认真修改一下，我一定会虚心听教的，最好可以告诉我错的地方错在哪就好了。如有需协商讨论，可再联系、

文章主要是围绕Togo 这个国家特色所写，欢迎大家的指导！

Answer 1

many traditional festival
Africa style
the most important’ s festival
knock the drum
all the people enter
dance happily until a week
it become
In August,20th
Here had many culture handicraft
such us
in Togo local
some special mask
interesting sculpture
初一的孩子我会觉得您创造性大有可为，学习潜力十足，中式英语不可怕
高中生甚至大学生，就很可怕啊，单复，倒装，形容词所有格混乱使用，朋友加油。

追问

呵呵谢谢，可是您的格式我看不太懂，就是不知道怎么改才正确啊。
麻烦您在原文上修改一下发上来好吗？
敝人初中水平，请多包涵

追答

Festival
There are many traditional festivals in Togo as well, such us Wrestling Festival , Hunting Festival and some others. They all have some special African styles. But the most important festival is Wrestling Festival .During the Wrestling Festival, all the people will take part in this active activity for celebriting, they often play the drums, dance together happily for a week or so. Wrestling Festival was once a large gathering of Kaby, an ethnic group in North Togo.However,it has come being into a popular national festival .
On August 20th,2010.Togo had their own national pavilion in the the 2010 World Expo of Shanghai,China. In Togo Pavilion, you could see various traditional architectue in Togo's distinctive style . There were many cultural handicrafts displaying then, for instance, the delicate handmade carpets ,the special masks ,the interesting sculptures and so on. 中学词汇，原文改动不大，语法均校正。加油，多看看语法，交流没问题，书面还要严谨啊。看好你！

Answer 2

festival应该是复数
such as
the most important festival 没有's
all the people take in part of it好一些吧
敲鼓应该用beat这个动词
应该是for a week
now it has become...用完成时
应该是there they had many cultural handicrafts.
such as the carpet of local Togo,some special masks and interesting sculptures