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德国是联邦制国家，联邦和各州的立法权力由《基本法》( 即宪法) 来明确。德国采取议会共和制，实行立法、司法、行政的三权分离。联邦议院和参议院是最高的立法机关; 最高行政机关是联邦政府。各州与联邦政府的协调经常通过由联邦总理和各州州长共同签署的“国家协议”来实现。
德国是一个以私有制为基础的发达的资本主义国家，德国实行“社会市场经济”模式，社会市场经济首要的特点是保护竞争，限制垄断。竞争秩序不能仅仅靠经济的自然秩序，也不能仅仅靠国家的法律秩序来创造和保障，而应把二者结合起来，由国家的秩序和政府的力量维护自由的市场经济。市场的有序竞争，给市场注人了活力，但竞争不是“放任”的，当竞争中出现社会所不期望的后果时，国家会进行干预，以体现社会公正性。对社会经济生活中的一些不平衡，还可通过社会力量进行纠正，以实现公平或公正。比如，通过税收来实现分配的平衡等。社会市场经济制度倡导社会进步，要求在发展经济的同时追求社会进步，如维护人的尊严，树立高尚的道德精神，发挥社会的安全保障作用等。
Germany is a federal, state, and federal and state legislative power by the basic law (namely the constitution) to clear. Germany take parliament a republic, implementing legislative, judicial and administrative separation of powers. The house and senate is the top legislative body; The highest administrative organ is the federal government. States and the federal government's coordination often through by the federal and state governor prime minister signed by the country's "agreement" to achieve.
Germany is to a private ownership as the foundation of the developed capitalist countries, Germany a "social market economy" mode, the social market economy the characteristics of the first is to protect competition, limited monopoly. The competition order can't just rely on the natural order of the economy, also can't just rely on the law of the country to order to create and security, but should combine the two, by national order and government power for a free market economy. Market and orderly competition, the energy to the market, but competition is not "easy", when the competition is not expected to appear in the consequences of society, the state would intervene, in order to reflect the social justice. For some of the social economic life balance, but also by social forces to correct, in order to realize fair or justice. For example, through the tax to realize the balance of the distribution, etc. Social market economy system advocate social progress, the requirements in the development of economy at the same time pursuing social progress, such as the maintenance of the dignity of people, set up the noble moral spirit, play the role of the social security.

Answer 1

◎ Germany is a federal, state, 德国是联邦制国
——点评：
不能用逗号，改为 Germany is a federal state

◎ and federal and state legislative power by the basic law (namely the constitution) to clear. 联邦和各州的立法权力由《基本法》( 即宪法) 来明确
——点评：
1、此处的“联邦”应该指“联邦政府”federal government，中心词是 the legislative power，联邦和各州的立法权力;
2、不定式 to clear 不能作谓语动词，另外 clear 含有清除的意思。这里“明确”指的是确定或决定。
整个句子似乎用 the legislative powers of the federal government and of each state are nailed down by the basic law (namely the Constitution) 表述更妥。

◎Germany take parliament a republic, implementing legislative, judicial and administrative separation of powers. 德国采取议会共和制，实行立法、司法、行政的三权分离
——点评：
1、Germany 指国家整体，属于单数，动词用 takes，不过“采取议会共和制”用 takes parliamentary republicanism as its political structure或者adopts parliamentary republicanism更好，
2、“实行立法、司法、行政的三权分离：implementing three balanced powers of the legislative, judicial and administrative,

◎ The house and senate is the top legislative body; The highest administrative organ is the federal government. 联邦议院和参议院是最高的立法机关; 最高行政机关是联邦政府
——点评
1、议院和参议院是两个并列的主语，前面都需要用定冠词，谓语动词要用复数：The house and the senate are the superior legislative body
2、分号后的句子属于并列句，首字母不能大写：the highest administrative organ is the federal government

◎ States and the federal government's coordination often through by the federal and state governor prime minister signed by the country's "agreement" to achieve. 各州与联邦政府的协调经常通过由联邦总理和各州州长共同签署的“国家协议”来实现
——点评
1、整个句子缺少谓语动词。本句的主体是“协调通过国家协议实现”，the coordination comes true through the State Agreement
2、“联邦总理和各州州长共同签署的”是“国家协议”的定语：the State Agreement signed together by federal prime minister and the states governors of each.

◎ Germany is to a private ownership as the foundation of the developed capitalist countries, 德国是一个以私有制为基础的发达的资本主义国家
——点评
1、主体：德国是一个发达的资本主义国家 Germany is a developed capitalist country
2、定语：以私有制为基础的 based on private ownership

※Germany a "social market economy" mode, the social market economy the characteristics of the first is to protect competition, limited monopoly. 德国实行“社会市场经济”模式，社会市场经济首要的特点是保护竞争，限制垄断
——点评
1、主体：德国实行“社会市场经济”模式 Germany carries out the social market economy pattern
2、非限制性定语：社会市场经济首要的特点是保护竞争，限制垄断 the principal traits of which is to protect competition and restrict monopolization

以下段落错误较多，不好一一点评，只能在原来的基础重新翻译：
◎ The competition order can't just rely on the natural order of the economy, also can't just rely on the law of the country to order to create and security, but should combine the two, by national order and government power for a free market economy. 竞争秩序不能仅仅靠经济的自然秩序，也不能仅仅靠国家的法律秩序来创造和保障，而应把二者结合起来，由国家的秩序和政府的力量维护自由的市场经济。
——重译
1、竞争秩序不能仅仅靠经济的自然秩序，也不能仅仅靠国家的法律秩序来创造和保障The competition order can't only rely on the natural order of the economy to create and ensure itself and the state legal order either
2、而应把二者结合起来，由国家的秩序和政府的力量维护自由的市场经济 but both of them should be combined in one and the uncontrolled market economy should be supported by the national order and government power.

○ Market and orderly competition, the energy to the market, but competition is not "easy", when the competition is not expected to appear in the consequences of society, the state would intervene, in order to reflect the social justice. 市场的有序竞争，给市场注人了活力，但竞争不是“放任”的，当竞争中出现社会所不期望的后果时，国家会进行干预，以体现社会公正性。
——重译
1、市场的有序竞争，给市场注人了活力, an ordered competition in market infuses energy into the market again
2、但竞争不是“放任”的, but competition is not to let it alone
3、当竞争中出现社会所不期望的后果时，国家会进行干预，以体现社会公正性, and just on the contrary, the state will have a finger in it to reflect society justness when there appears unanticipated consequence expected by the community in the competition.

◎ For some of the social economic life balance, but also by social forces to correct, in order to realize fair or justice. 对社会经济生活中的一些不平衡，还可通过社会力量进行纠正，以实现公平或公正。
——重译
1、对社会经济生活中的一些不平衡，For some of imbalance in socioeconomic life，
2、还可通过社会力量进行纠正，以实现公平或公正，通过税收来实现分配的平衡等，it can be corrected by social forces in order to realize fair or justice and the balance of distribution can be realized through tax revenue and so on

◎ Social market economy system advocate social progress, the requirements in the development of economy at the same time pursuing social progress, such as the maintenance of the dignity of people, set up the noble moral spirit, play the role of the social security. 社会市场经济制度倡导社会进步，要求在发展经济的同时追求社会进步，如维护人的尊严，树立高尚的道德精神，发挥社会的安全保障作用等。
——修改
Social market economy system advocates social progress and require economic advance to pursue social progress while it is developing, such as to maintain the dignity of people, set up noble moral spirit, to call the role of the social security into play.

全文修改如下：

Germany is a federal state, and the legislative powers of the federal government and of each state are nailed down by the basic law (namely the Constitution). Germany takes parliamentary republicanism as its political structure, implementing three balanced powers of the legislative, judicial and administrative. The house and the senate are the superior legislative body; the highest administrative organ is the federal government. The coordination of the states and the federal government comes true through the State Agreement signed together by federal prime minister and states governors.
Germany is a developed capitalist country based on private ownership and it carries out the social market economy pattern, the principal traits of which is to protect competition and restrict monopolization. The competition order can't only rely on the natural order of the economy to create and ensure itself and the state legal order either, but both of them should be combined in one and the uncontrolled market economy should be supported by the national order and government power. An ordered competition in market infuses energy into the market again, but competition is not to let it alone, and just on the contrary, the state will have a finger in it to reflect society justness when there appears unanticipated consequence expected by the community in the competition. For some of imbalance in socioeconomic life, it can be corrected by social forces in order to realize fair or justice and the balance of distribution can be realized through tax revenue and so on. Social market economy system advocates social progress and require economic advance to pursue social progress while it is developing, such as to maintain the dignity of people, set up noble moral spirit, to call the role of the social security into play.