Question

修改英语句子

Good evening, my dear teachers. I am glade to here for your interview.
My name is Makun and 30 years old. I came from Huang shan, a picturesque city in Anhui province with rich cultural background. There are some famous persons were born here, such as Hu jingtao, Hu shi, Zhu xi and so on.
My undergraduate and postgraduate accomplished in Anhui Normal University and graduated in 2008. Now, I am working at Huangshan University as a Physics teacher.
There are five persons in my family, my father, my mother, my wife, my son and me. My parents are farmers, they live in Lu’an, a city of AnHui province. My wife is my colleague and work in Huangshan University too, my sun was born two months ago, he is lovely.
I have some hobbies in my spare time，such as reading, listening music and sports. Basketball is my favorite sports. I was a member of our class basketball team in the period of university.
In the aspect of scientific researcher, I am interested in the theory of atomic structure and I have published a series of papers in these areas.

Answer 1

I am glade[glad] to[be/come] here for your interview 【动词不定式缺少谓语be或come,glad拼写错误】
My name is Makun and [I am]30 years old【前后主语不一致，不能省略】
I came [改为come]from Huang shan【表示一般事实，用现代式】
There are some famous persons [who]were born here[there]【定语从句的关系代词做主语，不能省略,here会被误认为代指你现在讲话的地点。】
My undergraduate and postgraduate accomplished ..改为[I accomplished my undergraduate..University]【人作主语，而非物，如是物做主语，应用被动语态was accomlished】
my father, my mother, my wife, my son and me(I).【用人称代词的主格】
There are five persons[改为people] in my family 【person强调个体，people复数名词】
such as reading[books], listening [to] music[s] and [playing]sports【类比，要形式相同】
Basketball is my favorite sports[sport].【sport具体强调哪种运动，用单数】
I have published a series of papers in these[those] areas.【those更合适】

Answer 2

Good evening, my dear teachers. I am glad to be here for your interview.
My name is Makun and I am 30 years old. I come from Huangshan, a picturesque city in Anhui province with rich cultural background. There are some famous persons who were born here, such as Hu jingtao, Hu shi, Zhu xi and so on.
I finished my undergraduate and postgraduate studies at Anhui Normal University. I graduated in 2008. I am a Physics teacher at Huangshan University.
There are five persons in my family, my father, my mother, my wife, my son and myself. My parents are farmers, they live in Lu’an, a city of AnHui province. My wife works at the same university with me. I have a two-month old son. .
I have some hobbies in my spare time，such as reading, listening music and sports. Basketball is my favorite sport. I was a member of varsity basketball team while I was in college.
In the aspect of scientific research, I am passionate about the theory of atomic structure and I have published a series of papers in these areas.