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高分求精准翻译几句话，希望语言简明，意思明确，并能用上丰富的句式和词汇

原文：感谢第一次（或上一次的）的拒签经历，它给了我一个宝贵的机会去重新审视自己，检查上一次所申请专业的问题，并重新规划自己的职业生涯。这一次，我有针对性地做了详尽的数据分析和行业调查，在此基础之上，我做出了这次的专业选择。

几个用词自己拿不准：
1.审视自己的问题（审视）
2.检查上次的专业问题（检查）
3.职业生涯（换个高级词代替career?）
3.有针对性地 （pertinently）
4.行业调查 （industrial investigation??）

Answer 1

Thanks for the previous refusal experience which gave me a valuable opportunity to review myself, check the problem about my speciality and replan my career. I targeted to analyse the data with detail and surveyed the industry conditions this time, and on the basis I made my professional choice.

职业生涯 用 career 很好。

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拒签用 visa rejection 行吗

这么说可以么：thanks for the previous visa rejection experience, it gives me a chance to review myself and check the problem about the program i selected.

speciality 有专业课程的意思吗？就是大学里的那种专业，类似于major

追答

visa rejection 可以，＝ visa refusal
我以为你是申请技术移民，所以译为speciality，如果是学业专业就是major。
这里的“机会”应该用“opportunity”
chance多指偶然的机会，含有侥幸的意味在内；opportunity多指特殊的机会，含有期待的意味
thanks for the previous visa rejection experience, it gives me a opportunity to review myself and check the problem about the major i selected.

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我发了站内信，麻烦看一下，谢了....

追答

什么站内信？没看见

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我整理好的句子
Thanks for the previous visa rejection, it gives me an valuable opportunity to review myself, check the major I selected originally, and to redesign my career in China. I target to analyse the data with detail, and survey the industry conditions pertinently this time.

时态问题：target to, survey，我用了一般现在可以吗（survey换成investigate是不是更好）

追答

我觉得用过去时比较好，因为你已经做了该事了。包括give和target,survey等。survey和investigate在这里没有优劣之分。originally这么用似乎有些不顺，换成at first感觉好一些。

Answer 2

I appreciate the first refusal experience, it gives me a invaluable opportunity to have a detailed look at myself, examine the problems with the speciality which I applied for last time and lay out my own career again. This time I choose this speciality which bases on elaborate date analysis and trades investigation which I have made correspondingly.

LZ 我查了不少例句,职业生涯用的都是career, 如果你真不喜欢,可以换个occupation用了.

Answer 3

1.审视自己的问题review my situation
2.检查上次的专业问题（检查）reconsider my last option of speciality
3.我的职业生涯my lifework 或 my progress through life
3.有针对性地 objectedly
4.行业调查 sector investigations