Question

高中英语短文改错---------在线等-----高手进

短文改错
文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处。没处错误涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改。
The first time I decide to leave home was when I was upon graduation in high school. I
was having trouble getting along with my parents. I had about fifty dollars in their pockets,
so I thought about leaving home. It spent me only two weeks away from home while I started
to feel homesick. Living on my own is a total different experience for three main reasons:
being more responsible, more decisive and more creative. Because of I’m on my own, I get to
deal with my duties without told. I have to be more careful because my parents are not here to
give me their advices. In the other hand, I could make my own future plan. I have made rules
for me to follow.

Answer 1

希望你可以采纳我的，我当时高考英文142分。比较准确，而且还有解释。
第一处：decide改为decided。（过去的一个决定，强调一般过去。）
第二处：in high school改成from high school(不强调在高中，而是说从高中毕业）
第三处：their改为my（是说我口袋里有50美元，而不是说父母口袋里）
第四处：spent改为took；（it take sb sometime to do sth，固定搭配）
第五处：while改为before(while的意思是当...时候，不符合句意。而是说，我仅仅离家两周后就开始想家了。）
第六处,将total改成totally(因为different为形容词，需要副词来修饰。比如说entirely different backgrounds(完全不同的背景），这里的entirely也是修饰different,是副词）
第七处：去掉of（ because后面跟从句）
第八处：without后面加being。（在没有被告导（的情况下），我开始处理我的职责。所以应该用被动）
第九处：advices改为advice。（advice为不可数名词）
第十处：In改为On（on the other hand，在另一方面，固定搭配）

Answer 2

The first time I decide （改成decided）to leave home was when I was upon graduation in (改成from) high school. I was having trouble getting along with my parents. I had about fifty dollars in their(改成my) pockets, so I thought about leaving home. It spent(改成took) me only two weeks away from home while(改成before) I started to feel homesick. Living on my own is a total(改成totally) different experience for three main reasons:
being more responsible, more decisive and more creative. Because of (去掉of)I’m on my own, I get to deal with my duties without (+ being)told. I have to be more careful because my parents are not here to
give me their advices(改成advice). In (改成on)the other hand, I could make my own future planI have made rules
for me to follow.

Answer 3

第一句：decide改为decided。
第三句：their改为my；about改为of,构成词组think of。
第四句：spent改为took；while改为when。
第六句：去掉of, because后面跟从句；without后面加being。
第七句：advices改为advice。
第八句：In改为On; plan改为plans。

Answer 4

decide--decided
in their pockets--in my pockets
it spent me--it took me
while--before
total-totally
because of--because
without told--without being told
advices--advice
in the other hand--on the other hand (另外，这个用法缺少前半部分on the one hand并不能单独使用)
for me--for myself

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