Question

请教英语高手改错，就几句话。谢谢

是05年的考研小作文，是一个辞职信。满分10分。请高手指点有什么错误，另外看看我能得几分。谢谢啦。
Dear Mr.Wang:
First and foremost,let me show my best appreciation for your help and direction on my work as the editor for your magazine during the past two months,thank you very much.You know,working with you is very amazing,from which I studied a lot.But I find it more and more hard for me to do this job because it's so far from my dream of being a journalist.I'd want to be a newspeper editor instead of a fashion magazine editor.so I'm so sorry to inform you that I'd want to end this job untill 31th of this months.please accept my resignation.
yours
XXXX

Answer 1

Dear Mr.Wang:
First and foremost,let me express my most appreciation for your help and direction on my work as the editor for your magazine during the past two months.You know,working with you, from which I have learned a lot, is really very amazing.However, I find it difficult for me to take this job any more, because it's remote from my dream of being a journalist. Instead of an fashion magazine editor, an newspaper editor will be my preference. So I'm very sorry to inform you that I want to end this job on 31th this month. Your understanding and support to approve my resignation will be appreciated.Thanks!
yours
XXXX

Answer 2

for your magazine ---of your magazine
studied ----have obtained
so I'm so sorry to inform you that I'd want to end this job untill 31th of this months-----so I'm sorry to submit this letter but I'd want to end this job untill 31th of this months