Question

讲解一下这篇英语作文吧！

一家知名外企准备与当地政府合作修建一所国际学校。为了建好、办好学校，该企业总裁 Mr. White广泛征求学生意见，并公开了他的邮箱地址。请你以“周珊”名义给她写一封E-mail，谈谈你的建议及理由。80词左右
内容要点：
1、 学习环境（如：教室 操场……）
2、 特色课程（如：网球 钢琴……）
3、 …….
参考范文：
Dear Mr. White,
I’m glad to hear you’ll build an international school, and I’d like to give you some advice. I think the new school should be nice and pleasant. Students need bright classrooms to study in, modern libraries to open up their eyes, large playgrounds to play different kinds of sports on. The school may provide students with some special courses, such as art, tennis or piano lessons. These courses can make students relaxed and encourage them to develop freely. It would be better for students to have some chances to practice in your company so that they can get some useful experience.
I hope I can enter the school.
Sincerely yours,
Zhou Shan
讲解一下每个句子（从句型、好处、特点来说）能具体点
谢谢大家喽！！！！！！！！！！！！！
从句型、好处、特点、内容来说

Answer 1

首先从整体上来说，本文写的彬彬有礼，非常courteous. 比如说‘ I’d like to give you some advice’ It is a pretty good sentence, I really appreciate it。接下来，我就要具体的帮你分析一下了。
第一句话I’m glad to hear you’ll build an international school运用了宾语从句，开门见山，不但显示出了作者的高水平，而且也使读者对整篇文章可以光从第一句话就能对整篇文章一目了然。接下来and I’d like to give you some advice说明了作者写这封信的目的。同样，第二句话也用了宾语从句。（注意：宾语从句在许多中国英语学习者的眼中看似简单，但很容易出错，所以如果你是一个学生，并不是十分good at English，我建议你不要用！！！）此句话表达了作者的看法，也可以说是开门见山，直接点题。第三句Students need bright classrooms to study in, modern libraries to open up their eyes, large playgrounds to play different kinds of sports on写得简直是fantastic，排比句将他人所期待的东西统统写了出来。这句话对你来说可能非常长，一些小细节，如....to study in, .... to play different kinds of sports on.这里要特别注意介词，前往不要忘记。接下来的这句The school may provide students with some special courses, such as art, tennis or piano lessons.要注意provide 的用法，provide sb with sth. 提供某人某物，注意介词with,不能落下。These courses can make students relaxed and encourage them to develop freely.这句话用的我不是特别欣赏，这句话可以和上一句话用一个定语从句，一句话就可以了。改成：The school may provide students with some special courses, such as art, tennis or piano lessons, which can make students relaxed and encourage them to develop freely.这样将会更好一些。这句话应该注意，make sb. ... sb 一定要用宾格形式。It would be better for students to have some chances to practice in your company so that they can get some useful experience.
运用了逻辑主语（it......to have....)将意思表达的更完整。词组：have chance to do sth.注意介词。so that=in order that, 但我认为，in order that 会更好一些，具体原因老师可能会讲，对你来说最主要好处还是in order that比so that 多一个字母，你可以去凑字数吗！！嘻嘻！！注意experience当经历讲时是可数名词，这里当经验讲就是不可数名词了，注意这一点！最后是作者表达自己的心愿，I hope I can enter the school.呼应开头。真正做到了首尾呼应，这也应该是你应该学习的地方。 写作文要有Topic sentence, 结尾要有呼应句，这才是好作文。
Sincerely yours, 信函礼貌用语，类似这样的句子还有Best regards，Yours sincerely你就多学多背吧。好了，就是这么多，希望我的回答对你有所帮助，谢谢。