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09-11年 安徽高考英语满分作文

Answer 1

2006【安徽卷】【试题回放】

　　假设你是李华，作为选派的交流学生在美国某中学学习了一年，寄住在Mr. Brown家里，刚回到国内。回国后，你发现自己的一本英语词典遗忘在他家，因此给他写了一封信，请他帮助寄回词典。信的主要内容如下：

　　感谢在美国期间他所提供的帮助
　　一本英语词典忘记带回
　　词典是美国老师送的，非常珍贵
　　词典很可能丢在卧室的书架上
　　邮资自己付

　　注意：
　　1、词数100左右;信的开头和结尾已为你写好。
　　2、可适当增加细节，使行文连贯
　　3、参考词汇：邮资-postage

Dear Mr. Brown,
　　I have been back, and write this letter to show my thanks. As the exchange student, you make me feel warm. Welcome to my country ,I’ll show you around in turn.
　　However , there exists a problem that I have left my dictionary at your home. I like it very much , for it was a precious gift from my teacher who comes from the U.S. I guess that my book may stay on your shelf in the bedroom .
　　Do you mind if you send my dictionary to me? I will pay for the postage and I’ll be very grateful if you show your warmness again.
　　I’m eager to receive your reply.
　　Yours,
　　Li hua

　　[名师点评]
　　本文作为信件，首先其格式是正确的。既然是应用文，那么文章的意图就要明确表示出来，本文在表达作者写作意图的时候，情真意切，用词委婉而合理。文章不但使用了定语从句，还采用了疑问句，让句式变化而不呆板。

2007【安徽卷】【试题回放】
　　假如你是李华，美国一所友好学校准备与你们学校共同创办一份中学生英文刊物，该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。请你给她写封回信，假如你是李华，美国一所友好学校准备与你们学校共同创办一份中学生英文刊物，该校格林先生来信询问有关情况。请你给她写封回信，主要内容如下：
　　l 表示赞成。 　　l 提出你喜欢的栏目。 　　l 简要说明理由。
　　注意：　　1. 词数100左右。　　 2. 新的开头和结尾已为你写好。　　
3. 适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。　　4. 参考栏目：栏目—column
　　Dear Mr. Green,
　　I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. That sounds great! And I definitely agree with you on that.
　　Some of the columns which you mentioned in the letter are really my cup of tea. Say, “culture express” gives us a better understanding of the world. Since people from different parts of the world have different values, it’s necessary to learn from each other. This will offer a wonderful chance. Apart from that, “blurt out” is pretty good for Chinese students to learn English idioms and improve oral English. Last but not least, “entertainment” is so cool! The popular singers, actors and celebrities are so catchy and attractive that you absolutely can’t miss it! Teenagers are just fond of the trendy things.
　　Well, I can’t list more. I really can’t wait to read that magazine!
　　Yours faithfully,
　　Li Hua
　　【名师点评】
　　这是一篇满分作文。由于这篇作文的出现，导致了安徽省该年的英语作文分数普遍偏低。仔细分析了这篇文章，写的的确是好，很地道的美式英语，一些词语的大胆使用，让人不得不猜测此人或者是家人可能有过国外生活的经历，否则这么地道标准的英语，可不是一朝一夕所能写出来的。比如说：my cup of tea, apart from that, oral English, last but not least, celebrities, catchy和trendy的大胆运用，list, can't wait to 简直是perfect! 况且文章中没有一个错误，不管是书写还是语法。英语能够学到这种程度，不可谓不让人佩服。

2011高考英语满分作文赏析

作文题目
　　假设你是李华，你的英国笔友Bob将于九月到你所在城市的建新华文学校学中文，来信请你在学校附近为他找一套住房。请根据图画提供的信息，写信介绍住房的情况，并告知住房面积为25平方米，月租500元。
　　注意：
1.词数：100左右：
　　2.参考词汇：房租—Tent(n.).

　　I’m very happy to receive your letter, and I’m glad to hear that you will go to China to learn Chinese here. I have already found a fiat for you. It is on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School. Bus No.11 can take you there, and it is one stop before the Chinese School. The flat is on the third floor with 3 rooms, one of which is bedroom, the other two are bathroom and kitchen. There are a bed, a sofa, a desk and some chairs in this 25 square-metres small fiat, and the rent is 500 yuan per month. Maybe this fiat is not as good as your wish, but I’ll try my best to meet your needs. If it is not suitable enough, write to me and I will look for another better place.
　　Hope you will come here soon!
　　All the best!
　　Yours,
　　Li Hua

　　满分理由
　　本文格式正确，意思表述完整，行文流畅自然。作者在写作过程中注意长短句并用，还使用了以 ‘which，’引导的非限定性定语从句，从而使文章层次分明，富于变化，不愧为考场佳作。

　　Dear Bob,
　　Welcome to China! You wrote to me to find a place for you.
　　I have found an apartment on Fangcao Street near Jianxin Chinese School. It is on the third floor and there’re three rooms in it: a bedroom, a kitchen, and a bathroom. There is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair in the bedroom. The house is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan per month.
　　Also from this house you can get to your school easily. Just take the No.11 bus at the bus-stop in front of the building. It is only one stop. At last, will you please tell me the time you arrive? Then I’U be able to meet you at the airport, see you.
　　Best wishes !
　　Yours,
　　Li Hua

　　满分理由
　　本文格式正确，内容完整，表述清楚，衔接紧密流畅，时态语态使用准确，特别是结尾末段适度的发挥，既充实了内容，又符合逻辑，成为本文与众不同的亮点。

　　Dear Bob,
　　How are you these days?
　　I’m so glad to know that you’ll come to our city to learn Chinese. You asked me to find a place for you. Now I’ve found one which I think is pretty good. The place is on Fang Cao Street which is near the No.11 bus stop. It’s just one stop away from Jianxin Chinese School.
　　There are three rooms, a kitchen, a bathroom and a bedroom. Though it is not very big, only 25 square metres, I think it is suitable. By the way, the rent is 500 yuan per month. I hope you’ll like it. If not, I’ll try to find another place for you.
　　Yours,
　　Li Hua

　　满分理由
　　本文内在逻辑性很强，由远及近。由外及内，层次分明，错落有致。同时让步状语从句运用得恰到好处，很出彩，再则结构完整，从开头的问候语到结尾都很完备。

　　作文：
　　Dear Bob,
　　I’m glad to hear from you.
　　Welcome to our city in september. I’ve found a suitable house for you.
　　The house is on Fang Cao Street, not far from the Jianxin Chinese School. If you take the No.11 bus, it is just one stop.
　　It is a flat on the third floor of a building. It has three rooms, a living-room, a bathroom and a kitchen. You can cook yourself. The mirror, the basin and the bathtub are very convenient for you. In the living-room, there is a bed, a sofa and a desk with chair. The desk is next to the window. It will be good for study. The total size is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan a month.
　　Will you be satisfied with this flat, or you want another one? Just let me know. I’ll try my best to help you.
　　Yours,
　　Li Hua

　　满分理由
　　本文内容详实，描述具体细腻，用词适当准确，如“suitable house”、“not far from’’等，另外文中的选择疑问句也很有新意。