Question

请各位英语高手帮帮忙！我有一篇演讲稿，请帮忙看看有没有语法上的错误，顺便为我改一下演讲稿。谢谢啦

Good morning everyone!My name is Anny.I'm very happy to stand here.Today I'd like to say something about "my favourite sport".My favourite sport is swimming.I like summer,because in summer I can swimming.Swimming is good for our healthy.So I often swim with my friends in the afternoon.Please come on with us.Let's swimming!Are you ready?Thanks for listening!

Answer 1

because in summer I can swimming.改为：swim
Swimming is good for our healthy前加一个词：besides, 另外败野肢察世是health
Let'脊嫌s swimming：加一个go
My favourite sport is 前加一个：For me,

追问

besides,是什么意思？还有就是besides后可以加health
然后就是为什么要在My favourite sport is 前加一个：For me呢
要求是在里面加入一些青奥会的精神之类的。你能帮我参谋一下吗?我可以把你选为最佳答案!拜托啦！

追答

是这样的，Besides,swimming is good for our health.是另外，游泳对我们的健康有好处的意思。显得说话有层次性、
既然是演讲，你的原文有一点生硬，不好意思哈。加一个for me,虽没有多大意义，至少表示了演讲的一种口语性，不知道你是否满意？

Answer 2

楼上的同志已经把少之又少的错误帮你挑出来了，昌悉，
只不过，，，
这真拦迅模的是一篇演讲简缓稿？？？
这篇小小的演讲稿虽然很简洁，，但是在逻辑上有点。。。。。

追问

那你帮我修改一下吧！我都不知道该怎么才好啦！求求你啦

追答

怎么跟你说呢，，你是想要就这么简单的，，也是可以的

追问

主要是他要求是一分钟的演讲稿

追答

Good morning everyone!My name is Anny.I'm very happy to stand here.Today I'd like to say something about "my favourite sport".My favourite sport is swimming, because as we all know, swimming is good for our health. Another reason is that I love swimming in summer and enjoying the brilliant sunshine. Therefore I often swim with my friends on weekends. Please come on with us. Let's go swimming and enjoy it! Thanks for listening!
不知道可不可以