Question

帮我看看这篇英语作文有什么错误以及不妥，Thanks

Answer 1

以下数字为句子顺序。
第1段：
1. (numbers don't emerge)----The number of museums which offer free admission has risen/mounted all over the country.
2. The news is as desirable as its aim is clear. (crystal is redundant)
3. 去掉always, 可以改成often/usually; (with passion for what?) 可以改为with passion for learning/history/archeology...; 加s: on the museum doors (plural because you haven't specify anything); due to economic factor
4. gives rise to the emergence of free-admission museums (去掉the), 或者gives rise to the necessity of creating more free-admission museums
5. 第5句可以和第4句合并: emergence of free-admission museums which naturally cater to the curiosity of these young vistors.

第2段：
1. (as well as what?) 直接去掉as well或者改成as well as benefits.
2. 很好，没错。就是忘了加句号。
3. which前面去掉逗号; 建议可以在impede前面加may,但也可以不用; (there's no such thing as heritages) these sites of cultural heritage/these cultural heritage sites
4. according to one museum curator/according to museum curators; 建议改成present tense, allow their children (从上下文来说更通顺些）

第3段：
1. In my opinion, since every coin has two sides, we should also assess rationally the shortcomings of free admissions (in museums).
2. 在after all前面加上however/yet; 去掉in; the advantages of free admissions outweigh its disadvantages (你忘了加s).
3. (meanwhile?你想说什么?) 改meanwhile为in addition/furthermore; basic (no words exists as ‘basical'); (how is familiarity with culture a part of 'stepping into society'?) 建议将stepping into society改成our education.