Question

请大家把这篇作文的语法错误给指出来...并看看能得多少分...

In the passage, we know that birthdays mean not only cake , present , and a sweet song - "Happy birthday" but also the other things around the world and that the varied birthday are celebrated in varied ways .
As for me , the birthday is common because everyday must be birthday for somebody whose birthday is today . My birthday is common .It has nothing apart from cake , presents , and a song of birthday .
while my friend's birthday is commoner than mine . I never forget that birthday of my friend . That day , no one knew that day was his birthday apart from me . I waited and watched who would celebrate his birthday , but no one . I thought whether he would have a birthday which has no cake , no presents and no song of birthday . As a result , my idea became the truth . Oh , he was a pitiful boy .And then I decided to send him a seasoning -"The Old Godmother" . In evening , he stayed at home to eat
a seasoning from me alone .

这是题目.........

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
You may think birthdays mean only cake, presents, and a sweet song—”Happy Birthday”. However, there are many varieties of birthday celebrations. In the West, many birthday traditions come from an ancient belief that bad spirits showed up on a person’s birthday. To drive troublemaking spirits away, friends would visit each other on their birthdays. Today, people still get together for birthday parties. But around the world, birthdays are celebrated in many different ways.
In eastern Canada, children get their noses covered with butter on their birthdays. The butter is supposed to make children too slippery for bad luck to stick to them. Irish people lift birthday children upside down and hit them lightly on the floor for every year of their age. Mexico also has a unique birthday tradition. A paper-made animal is filled with candy and toys and hung from the ceiling. The birthday child with his eyes covered then tries to hit the animal with a stick until it bursts open.
[写作内容]
1) 请用30个词概括短文的要点：
2) 然后以约120个词写一篇记叙文，描写你或你朋友的一次生日经历，并包括以下要点：
①你或你朋友通常怎样庆祝生日；
②介绍一次令你或你朋友难忘的生日经历。
[写作要求]
可以参照阅读材料的篇章结构，组织故事，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。
[评分标准]
概括准确、语言规范、内容合适，篇章连贯。

Answer 1

语法错误倒没什么，但这样的文章拿不到高分，25的话，大概16、17分左右。总结部分还好，基本大意是这样了。但后面的两要点处理不好。要点1的关键词是“如何”，所以要在作文中明确点明，且最好有主题句。要点2是“难忘”，那就要写出如何难忘。而且要点2的开始句互相矛盾。