Question

帮我看看这段英语有哪些语法错误？修改下，谢谢！（意思不要改变，注意语法正确和时态一致）

The network technology has got very great development in recent years, and the online information resources are developing from deficient to rich and colorful too, and fill with everything. But with the development of the internet, the safe of network is becoming more and more severe. The network safe precaution seems very important for normal running of our campus network too. So, under now available condition, how to improve the campus network security, ensure the operation of campus network stable and highly efficient, become an important subject which the article deals with. Security of network is a complicated system, related to many factors, like the system software, hardware, environment, users and so on. The article based on the network security, discussed that the user of a variety of network security technology in solving the campus network security. And put forward specific safeguard the campus network security solutions. The thesis main content as follows: Firewall Technology, Intrusion Detection System (IDS), Data Encryption, Anti-virus Technology and so on. Except that, the paper also discussed the non-area of technology like policy, environment in the campus network of safe constructional application. At last, the paper made a summary and outlook to the application in solving campus network security with the security technologies of network.

Answer 1

有错误，应为没看到中文，所以就照原文改了下语法，括号里的是我改的部分，后面懒得写了原因了……
The network technology has got very great development in recent years, and the online information resources are developing（and前后时态不一致，改为have developed） from deficient to rich and colorful（缺少宾语,加上situation） too, and（跟前面的不能并列，改为as it is filled） with everything. But with the development of the internet, the safe（改为safety） of network is becoming（weaker and weaker）. The network safe precaution seems very important for normal running of our campus network （去掉too）. So, under （去掉now） available condition, how to improve the campus network security, （and）ensure the （stable and highly efficientoperation） of campus network , become an important subject which the article deals with. Security of network is a complicated system, related to many factors, like the system software, hardware, environment, users and so on. The article based on the network security, discussed that the user of a variety of network security technology in solving the campus network security. And put forward specific safeguard the campus network security solutions. The （main content in thesis）: Firewall Technology, Intrusion Detection System (IDS), Data Encryption, Anti-virus Technology and so on. Except that, the paper also （discusses） the non-area of technology like policy, environment in the campus network of safe constructional application. At last, the paper made a summary and outlook to the application in solving campus network security with the security technologies of network.

Answer 2

没