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如何在小托福写作考试中得满分?我考过4次托福(纯粹 爱好 ,第一次分就够了) 作文 都是满分,SAT作文也是满分12分。下面给大家 说说 经验 !

如何在小托福写作考试中得满分

说在前面:因为我词汇、语法、句法实在是不行,所以走的写作路线是纯平民路线,没有任何SAT词汇,句法貌似只有定语从句,所以很简单……英语基础和我一样低等的人也很好上手。

我不是英语高手,我只是作文帝。

首先要搞明白的是,考试中的Essay永远不是抒情文、 记叙文 或者文学作品,而是 议论文 ,是表现一个学生逻辑思考、思想深度以及行文结构表达方式的载体,所以记住的是“重要的不是你的句法、词汇,而是你的思想、结构。”

几个注意点

1.不要用长句

三立在线作文最牛逼的北京的史愚老师亲口教导我的,长句有两个问题,一是中国学生水平不够,很难写出语法没有错误、意思表达准确的长句,语法错误、几个逗号连用、倒装从句混合是经常的。二是看essay的人也是人,经常是那种大学生研究生,没人愿意看长句混在一起的 文章 ,短剧更讨人喜欢,并且表达意思更加清晰,准确。

2.细节要注意

出现My brother, friend的时候加上名字,出现university的时候要给上名字,给出事例的时候要给出时间地点人物,没人愿意看“我的弟弟去了一个大学,然后再大学里交了很多朋友,后来去了公司里那些朋友成为了他的财富”,而“我的弟弟Dan去了Upenn读书,在学校里认识了Jeff、Dennis等好朋友,而他后来去Google公司工作的时候发现了他们成为了自己一生宝贵的财富”比上面那句好了很多。实在要写流水账也要写出细节和感觉。

3.瞎编要编的像

不解释

4.自己的事例难写,最好不要写

5.积累,积累,再积累

没有积累和自己独立的想法

下面就是926考的一题托福题,实在是想不出来考试时写的每句话,大概简短的还原一下当时写的东西,希望有所帮助

It is more important for government to pay attention to health care issues than environmental issues, do you agree or not?

(题目,环境保护和医疗改革哪个更重要)

"Water and air are the sources of people's lives, and the bases of the world." This was said by the ancient greek philosopher Thales.(开头引用是最简单的,泰勒斯相信水和空气是最重要的元素,相似的话说过,稍加改动就可以出一个quote)(谢谢45楼的朋友纠正,是Thales说的,不是Hume)Looking at the dirty air in the sky, smelling the gross smell from Yantze River, I can't agree with him any more.(这就是搞笑的= =) The environmental issues are always the most important to a country, especially the country I live in, China.(可以适当点出我提出这个论点的原因,毕竟不存在完全客观的文章,主观因素客观环境都要适当强调)

When the environment is becoming worse and worse, I have to say it is the most serious problem in this country. My junior high classmate , Anita, lived by the end of the Yangtze River. The industrial area is around there and all the factories pollute the water day by day. Unfortunately she got cancer, like many people who lived there.(真人真事,默哀一分钟) If the polluted environment wants to "kill" you, there is no doctor in this world can save us. Looking at her face in the funeral, I finally understood the importance of protecting environment.(真人真事要写出细节和感觉,否则很难不像流水账)

It is always early to improve the health care, but never the environment. My dad is the president of the city hospital, and he always tells me "If the government gives us enough money, this hospital can be the best one in this country very quick by hiring best doctors and buying newest equipment."(真人语言描写,用他人的口说你想说的话) But we all know that the environment is always harder to save. After second industrial revolution in Britain, thepollution in Thames River became horrible. When the British government realized that problem, it took them tens of years to solve it.(用实例证明) Just like my mom always told me, " It's easy to make something dirty, really hard to make it clean again."

It's kind of like the paradox, but many times, the environmental problems cause many health care issues.(一般考试都是二选一,有时候你会发现你选的那个其实可以导致或_没选的那个,也就是说这点要是点出来的话,就更证明你的论点的正确性了) Many datas do prove that, the people who live in a good environment have better quailities of lives. In 1970s, LBJ, the president of United States, passed a proposal which was called Clean Water Plan.(真事,积累) It was made to make the water clean in the US, and it did work. The most amazing thing is that the datas show the numbers of patients in hospital decreased rapidly during first 15 years.(瞎编,有一定的事实根据) That does prove my point, the environmental issue is a important factor of the health care issues.

As I said, we do realize the seriousness and importance of the environmental issues. We do need a "Heaven" with clean water and air, green trees and beautiful mountains. The "Hell" with doctors and hospitals is always our last choice.(结尾很重要,搞笑、正经、引用都可以)

就这样,希望大家都成为作文帝。

托福考试作文 范文 :技术创新改变世界

托福考试作文题目:

Directions:

The independent essay usually asks for your opinion about a familiar topic. You will have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your response. Typically, a good essay for the independent topic will require that you write 300–350 words.

Question:

Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way that nations interact with each other in a global society. Choose another technological innovation that you think is important. Give specific reasons for your choice.

托福考试作文参考分析:

要求考生通过定位,概括和分类仔细审题,就某个问题写一篇感想,或就一个事件进行阐述,解释以及论证自己的观点,列出提纲明确主题并围绕主题来写作和修改文章。

托福考试作文范文参考

Although internet came into being about 2 decades ago, it has changed the way we live much more than the last 200 years. Its influence on business, communication and information is so profound that people now simply can't live without it.

Based on the development of internet, a lot of new types of business ranging from international conglomerate to regional small online shops are also established. The most famous internet based international conglomerate would be Google. Companies like this basically do not sell products but their service. This changed the traditional way of doing business which always involved some concrete products sell to people. Internet opens a cyber world in which a huge market is untapped. Besides large companies, internet also prospers small businesses. For example, local stores can do their business online. All they have to do is to create a website of their own and all customers need to do is to go to their websites and order what they want. Then they just need wait at home for the products they just purchased to be delivered. This way, we never need to worry about the traditional exhausting shopping.

Internet also fundamentally changed the way people communicate. There are a lot of chatting programs, such as MSN, YAHOO MESSENGER, SKYPE, that make it possible for people from different parts of the world to have a conversation with each other as long as everyone has access to internet. They even provide audio and video services meaning not only people can chat, but also they can hear and see each other. Besides that, what really makes them appealing is that they don't charge us for doing these things. These advantages definitely surpass the service that mobile phone provides us.

Internet is also like a huge tank that can contain almost infinite information. A search has shown that right now the information that internet can provide us exceeds any library in the world and some even argue that it has more information than all the libraries in total. I certainly wouldn't doubt that. I use internet to search for a lot of information. Whenever I have an project to finish, the first thing I do is to go to the internet to find relevant materials.

There is no doubt that internet has had a fundamental change on our everyday life. Though there are many problems that accompany with it, we can't deny that internet is one of the most innovations in human history.

托福考试作文范文:父母应代替少年 儿童 作决定吗

托福考试作文题目:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

托福考试作文参考分析:

表明立场:这样的做法有一定的道理。支持这样的做法的理由:older teenage children还不够成熟(immature),考虑不够周全(inconsiderate),尤其涉及到经济相关的决定时,缺乏独立承担能力(incapable of being independent)。然而,“如何保证parents或者adult relatives所作的决定就是正确的”也是个问题。另外,总是把孩子排除在决定权之外,是否会使孩子变得“没能力做出任何决定”?the ability to make sound decision是人生道路上很重要的能力之一。

托福考试作文范文参考:

The issue of whether parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their teenage children arouses much controversy among people with different perspectives and backgrounds. Some people believe the statement is legitimate, because children are not mature and have not enough experiences to determine the optimal choice. On the other hand, people claim that nobody can control other's life even their parents. People should be responsible for their own behaviors and determine their lives. As far as I am concerned, I would like to refute the former and support the latter. In the following discussing, I would like to address some evidence to substantiate my point of view.

In the first place, the most important reason for me to choose this position is that old teenagers have their own thoughts and ideas. The fact that the thoughts of children are not perfect and logical does not mean their parents have right to eliminate their decision without considering the children's intentions. In the era of rapid social and technological changes leading to increasing life complexity and psychological displacement, the good decision in parents' time would be out of data.

In the second place, the job of parents is not to make decision for their children, but to help them to choose. In this period of 15 to 18 year-old children, they are always radical. If their parents make decisions instead of themselves, they will not obey these decisions. Parents had better told their kids about their opinions, worries and experiences as friends. Give much more room for their kids to think and decide. Respect and believe their kids will choose the better one and will face the result directly.

In sum, considering the aforementioned reasons I support the statement that older teenagers had better make decisions by themselves. Admittedly, our parents are our best and most early teacher. They would give us more important advices to help us choose the best decision.

托福考试作文范文:

托福考试作文题目:

Students should spend at least one year working or traveling before they go to university? Do you agree or disagree? ( 2016年3月13日)

高中生应该在上大学之前至少工作或者旅行一年,是否认同?

思路拓展:

【间隔年之利好】

① 兼职工作可以帮助年轻人积累工作经验,获得自我成就感,使他们对于社会有了更加深刻的洞察,为未来的择业打下坚实基础。

② 旅行可以开拓视野、丰富知识、结交新友,锻炼独立性,这些对于未来的发展是有利好的。

③ 工作和旅行提高了人的社会意识,丰富了人生的阅历,成熟了人的心态。

【间隔年之弊端】

① 很多孩子可能沉迷工作和旅行不再回归校园,如果这样,间隔年就失去了它的初衷。

② 青春期是人的求知欲望最强,也是学习能力和 记忆力 最强的宝贵时期,高中生不应该耽误一年的时间远离校园而去打工或是闲逛,否则,学业就会被耽误。

③ 高中生没有形成核心竞争力,很难找到工作。即使是找到,也很容易被欺骗和剥削。

托福考试作文范文参考:高中生是否应该经历间隔年

【首段】背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

Such is human nature to explore the unknown and see the outside word,that is why a great many high school graduates are keen on traveling or working for a period of time before attending dream universities. Conflicting ideas clash in determining whether or not it is a wise idea to inspire high school leavers to experience the Grand Tour. As I see it, the merits of experiencing the gap year outshine its potential demerits.

【二段】 间隔年之利好

The most important educational benefit of taking a year off before starting university life is that traveling exposes young adults to stunning places and exotic cultures. It is one thing for teenagers to read about distant countries, but it is even better to enrich the experience of the world on one’s own. What one learns by associating with strangers and absorbing diverse cultures is something he or she could never acquire in the classrooms. For example,I made many congenial friends by self-travel to Tibet after finishing my schooling. This fantastic journey not only expanded my mind but also alleviated my stress triggered by tight academic study. Feasting my eyes on the stunning landscape really sweetened my life and lifted my spirit.

【三段】间隔年之利好

Virtually, youngsters can also become the beneficiaries of working as part-timers too. By that I mean, earning a living has a key role to play in helping one accumulate relevant working experience, train one’s crisis-solving abilities and deepen one’s insight into the society, which will lay a solid foundation for one’s future career ladder. To illustrate, via embarking on part-time jobs, I knew that money doesn’t grow on trees. Then, I studied even harder when coming back to campus.



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