Question

english ,英文作文，求大家帮忙点评一下。万分感谢！

Fishing is my favourite pastime. Last Sunday, I spent the whole day on fishing without catching anything.
“I can’t go home without any fish, my wife sure laughs at me”, I thought.
So I was very proud of myself when I went home after going to market to buy some fish. My wife did not congratulate me and asked where had got this not very fresh fish.
作文大意：我没有钓到鱼，担心老婆嘲笑。我就去市场上买了一条鱼说是我自己钓的。结果回家后，我老婆一下子就问我从哪买的这些不新鲜的鱼？求大家修改一下。谢谢

Answer 1

作文的整体结构没有什么问题。 你似乎有意识地使用as to me ,in conclusion !

Answer 2

第三行开始，I can't go home unless I can get some fish,my wife will sure laugh at me.
So I went to the market and bought a fish to pretend that I have got it myself.
But to my surprise,my wife asked me straight away:where did you buy the stale fish?
亲。求最佳答案噻。