Question

请帮忙看看下面两个英语文段有无语法或其他什么明显的错误？如有请指出并说明原因，

如果能给出优美地道的修改方案那就再好不过了。
On the morning of April 29，2007，from 10:00 to 11:00,hundreds of millions of
students from primary,middle schools and universities all over China joined
in a national student sports program. Eleven million students in Jiangsu took
an active part in this program.
April 29,2007 kicked off a new national initiative to promote sports in
China.For one hour,from 10:00 to 11:00,hundreds of millions of students of
all ages joined in a national student sports program.In Jiangsu
province,eleven million students eagerly participated.

Answer 1

这个没必要修改。。 因为已经很完美了。

joined 后面可以加个 together. Hundreds of millions of students.. joined together in a national..

第二段有个明显的错误。。

第一句话的开头最好改为 ： China kicked off a new national initiative on April 29, 2007 to promote..

另外 joined 后面也可以加个 together 这样比较顺。

～ ♥ 自己认真回答的，应该是正确的理解，敬请采纳、