Question

帮忙批改下这篇雅思大作文吧，感谢！

题目：
Some people think university education should
prepare students for employment while others think it should help students
acquire theoretical knowledge. Discuss both views and give your own
opinion.
Nowadays, people are discussing what university education should be,
theoretical or practical. Based on my experience, I want to emphasize
that practical skills have the equal importance with theoretical knowledge for
university students, in spite of each of them has its own sake on building one's
knowledge system. And I tend to think that what people worry about will not be a
matter if university education gave both practical and theoretical courses and
arrange them reasonably, or just let students make their own decisions.

Answer 1

Nowadays, people are (discussing 要改为 arguing about) what university education should offer students, some say theoretical knowledge is (necessary 改为 the priority), others think university education should prepare students for employment . (Based on my experience 要改为 In my personal opinion), I want to emphasize that practical skills are equally as important as theoretical knowledge for university students. And I tend to think that what worrys people will not be a
problem if university education (gave 改为 provide) both practical and theoretical courses and
arrange them (reasonably 改为 suitably 或 wisely), or just let students make their own decisions.

discussing 是商量，这是不同意见的争论，所以要用 arguing about。

Based on my experience 并不适合，因为你还是学生，尚谈不上甚麼经验，所以你只可提出你的意见，或说出你私人的看法，因之我替你改为 : In my personal opinion.

很高兴能够帮到你，希望会对你有助。

Answer 2

Nowadays, people are discussing what university education should offer students,
Some say theoretical knowledge is necessary, others think university education should
prepare students for employment . Based on my experience, I want to emphasize
that practical skills are equally as important as theoretical knowledge for
university students. And I tend to think that what worrys people will not be a
problem if university education gave both practical and theoretical courses and
arrange them reasonably, or just let students make their own decisions.