Question

英语作文批改

The Zhang Lei, who is my friend.I get alone with him one year.In the begining.He gived me first impression is selfh and do not glad to help others .Because he seldom talk with me. when i ask him to help me solve a math problem.he always let me think by myself.
however .a nighe of winter. i very headche .zhang lei took me to the hospil immediately and lookde after me on the whole night. i was deely moved by her action and i relize that i misunddook him.since this event.he and me became good friends.

Answer 1

Zhang Lei is my friend. I had got along with him for one year. At the begining. he gave me the first impression is that he is selfish and do not like to help others .Because he seldom talk, when i ask him to help me solve a mathethmatics problem, he would always let me think by myself.
However .in one winter night, I felt very headache. Zhang lei took me to the hospital immediately. He looked after me for the whole night. i was deeply moved by his action and I realize that I misunderstood him.
Since this event, he and me became good friends.

Skillso: I am not sure how old are you, but I think your idea for the composition is okay. You should check your spellings and the gender. You have mix up her and his. I tried to correct you by not changing your sentence structure much, so as to keep the originality of what you want to express. Anyway good job, if you are in 初二/三。

追问

我已经是高2了.哎.还写这么烂的作文.

追答

喔，高二就差了，赶紧学习！

Answer 2

　　Zhang Lei is my friend. I have been geting alone with him for one year. At the begining, the first impression which he gived me is selfish and it seems that he dose not glad to help others because he seldom talk with me. When I ask him to help me solving a math problem, he always lets me think by myself.
　But, in an night of winter, i was headche. Zhang Lei took me to the hospital immediately and looked after me a whole night. I was deely moved by his action and I relized that I misunderstood him. After this event, we became good friends.