Question

急,请高人帮我翻译一下,谢谢了

老师的FEEDBACK对我来说真的是非常重要，它让我知道了我写作的弱点在哪里。从老师还给我的第一篇文章的feedback中可以看出，我现在的writing主要存在3个方面的问题。第一：文章的每个段落中缺乏TOPIC SENTENCE，使读者不清楚文章的意图。第二：句与句之间没有linking words，同时不太会使用很复杂的句形，导致每一个句子都很短。第三：存在大量的语法错误。如何避免这些问题在以后的写作中出现，我认为必须要加强语法的学习，以及多多练习使用一些比较复杂的句子。在今后的写作当中，我会特别注意这几点。
谢谢请不要使用在线的翻译软件,我是真的很急需,请大家能够认真回复,谢谢了

Answer 1

My teacher's feedback to me is really very important, it let me know where is the weaknesses of my writing. From the first article's feedback that my tearcher gives me i can tell that rightnow my writing has three problems. First: the lack of topic sentence in paragraphs of each article so that readers do not know the intention of the article. Second: between sentence and the sentence there are no linking words, at the same time i'm not good at using very complex sentence shapes, resulting in every sentence in my article becomes short. Third: there are a lot of grammatical mistakes. How to avoid these problems in the future in Writing, I think I need to strengthen the learning of grammar, as well as to practice a lot to use some of the more complex sentences. If I write aricles in the future, I will pay special attention to these points.

是我修改了google的机翻以后自己翻的 我是北外的 专业方面没问题 你可以放心

Answer 2

厉害

Answer 3

FEEDBACK teacher to me is really very important, it let me know my writing where the weaknesses. From the teachers back to my first article can be seen in the feedback, I am now writing mainly in three aspects. First: paragraphs of each article, the lack of TOPIC SENTENCE so that readers do not know the intention of the article. Second: between sentence and the sentence did not linking words, at the same time will not be a very complex sentence shape, resulting in a very short sentence. Third: there are a lot of grammatical mistakes. How to avoid these problems in the future in Writing, I think we need to strengthen the learning grammar, as well as to practice a lot to use some of the more complex sentences. Writing in the future, I will pay special attention to these points.