Question

请帮忙修改一下初中英语作文吧~谢谢！

主题：我心中的成功人士。 要求：1.人物简介 2.人物事迹 3.对你的启示
The successful man in my heart
Who is the successful man in my heart?sure is my friend Fandy.Shi is 14 years old,and she is good at study.She is a very friendly girl who with a long black hear,She usually help me with some trouble at my study.What a good girl! I think She is successful.She do everything perfect! I will learn from her,to help others,and try to do my best! I will study hard in order to catch her!
(PS.知道自己写得很烂。。。不过很想知道哪里有错误，还有那些句子可以改的更好的！求高手修改~~~~谢谢！不胜感激啊亲！！！）

Answer 1

The successful man in my heart
Who is the successful man in my heart?sure is my friend Fandy.A14 years old beautiful girl with a long black hear who is good at study.What is more ,She is esay to get along with,It is she that always does me a favor whenever I am in trouble . What a good girl! she is my angel in my life I think .There is no doubt that She is successful.She almost does everything perfectly Fandy.sets a good example for me and I will learn from her ----try to do my best,and to help others,! I will study hard in order to catch up with her!
个人意见，水平有限，仅供参考 ，注意单复数， catch her是抓住她，应用catch up with her

Answer 2

Who is the successful man in my heart?sure（Of course） is my friend Fandy.Shi（She） is 14 years old,and she is good at study.She is a very friendly girl who with(has) a long black hear(hair),She usually help(helps) me with some trouble at(on) my study.What a good girl! I think She is successful.She do(does) everything perfect(perfectly)! I will learn from her,to help others,and try to do my best! I will study hard in order to catch her!
有些单词拼错了，注意在一般现在时中，she\he以及单个人名动词后面后要用第三人称单数，