Question

假如你是李华，你的英国笔友Bill来信询问你家乡是否有雾霾（smog）天气，情况如何。请按下面提示写一封电

假如你是李华，你的英国笔友Bill来信询问你家乡是否有雾霾（smog）天气，情况如何。请按下面提示写一封电子邮件：1、感谢他的关心；2、简要介绍本地雾霾情况及给人们生活带来的危害；3、人们已认识到雾霾天气的危害，正采取各种举措减少其发生。注意：1、字数150左中；2、开头结尾已经给出，不计入文字总数。

Answer 1

Dear Bill, I’ m glad to receive your letter, thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the smog. Since the winter last year, the smog has occurred a lot of times. it has done great harm to our daily life. A great number of people have to stay at home for fear of the poisonous air caused by the smog. Smog –related disease get more and more people to hospital. What’s worse , many traffic accidents happened and many flights have to be put off. Fortunately, people have realized the great harm caused by the smog and the importance of protecting the environment..Effective measures are being taken to reduce the smog weather. People are supposed not to go to work by car. According to me, I will go to school by bike or on foot, I will tell whoever I meet to protect the environment as possible as they can. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply. Yours Sincerely, Li Hua

试题分析：考查提纲式作文：以李华的名义给你的英国笔友Bill写信介绍雾霾（smog）天气的情况，考生首先要认真阅读前面的提示，认清写作要求和提纲之间的关系，这篇文章的提纲很详细，根据所给提纲，以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当。语言力求准确、简洁。根据情景的发展，按顺序安排好材料。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性。考生必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等 【亮点说明】范文用了一些常见的短语：do great harm to“对…造成伤害”， for fear of “唯恐，害怕”，put off“推迟”，be supposed not to do不应该做…，looking forward to“渴望”， 还有一些语法知识和句型：a great number of people have to stay at home for fear of the poisonous air caused by the smog. 这句话用过去分词做定语， Fortunately,People have realized the great harm caused by the smog and the importance of protecting the environment.这句话用动名词做宾语，.Effective measures are being taken to reduce the smog weather. 这句话用了现在进行时的被动语态， I will go to school by bike or on foot, I will tell whoever I meet to protect the environment as possible as they can.这句话用了whoever引导的宾语从句，还有范文用了What’s worse , According to me,这样的关联词使文章更加连贯。