Question

请大神帮忙修改一下英语演讲稿~谢谢

Dreams arebeautiful
I think youwill ask, what is my dream? I will proud to tell you, I want tobe an outstanding scientist.
Why do Iwant to be a scientist? Scientists all day in the lab are boringhard, isn't it? But do you ever think, if there is no heat in dedicatedto the truth of the scientists, the history of mankindwill be stagnant, we won't live such a comfortable and happylife today。 Therehave a phone to call, the computer knows the world, the plane can fly aroundthe world... The mission of scientists is great, and this great arederived from their perseverance and dedication. So I want to be ascientist.
To be a scientistis easier said than done. Because when scientists want to know a lot of knowledge,must have the innovation spirit. So from now on, I will work hard,listening carefully in class, read more useful books after class, not afraid ofdifficulties and I will be strong
If I reallybecame a scientist, I want to serve my greatmotherland with my wisdom, likeThomas Edison invented many useful things for his motherland. Iwant to invent something, can maintain health and cure disease.
I hope my dreamcome true
谢谢大家，大家都说得非常好！

Answer 1

I will proud of telling you
boring就行，没有boring hard这种讲法,aren't they?
接下来这句话if 后面的非常的confuse，不知道你要表达什么
we wont have a such comfortable and happiness life today
(后面整段都是中式英语，无法理解）
it is easier to say but is more difficult to do.Because scientists should have plenty of knowledge and have always retained their pioneering spirit.
直接就是From now on......and im not afraid(说完整了要不就错了）
If i truly become a scientist,
I want to invent things which improve human healthy and the level of disease treatment.

希望能够帮到你！【ABC.Snap】

Answer 2

手机上改的，请自己检查拼写。

Dreams are beautiful
I think you may ask, what is my dream? I can proudly tell you that, I want to be an outstanding scientist.
Why do I want to be a scientist? You may think that, Scientists work all day in the lab with boring hardness, isn't it? But do you ever think, if there is no efforts dedicated to the truth by the scientists, the history of mankind will be stagnant, we won't live such a comfortable and happy life today。 Thinks the phone,we can make to call, with the computer we knows the world at home, by plane we can fly around the world... The mission of scientists is great, and this great are derived from their perseverance and dedication. So I want to be a scientist.
To be a scientist is easier to say than to do. Because when scientists want to understand something, they must have the sense of innovation. So from now on, I will work hard, listen at full concentration in class, and read more useful books after class, without any fearing of difficulties, and I will be strong.
If I really became a scientist, I want to serve my great motherland with my wisdom, likeThomas Edison who invented many useful things for his motherland. I want to invent something also, which can maintain people's health and cure diseases.
I hope my dream come true.

追答

有几处错误需更正。
1、 Thinks 【to】 the phone, we can make ( to 多余，应删去)call，
2、and this great 【is】(are) derived from

Answer 3

Dreams are beautiful
I think you will ask, what is my dream? I will be proud to tell you, I want to be an outstanding scientist.
Why do I want to be a scientist? Scientists stay in the lab all day, which is boring and hard, isn't it? However, have you ever thought, if there is no heat in dedicated to the truth of the science, the history of mankind will be stagnant. We won't live such a comfortable and happy life today。 There is a phone to make a call, the computer to know the world and the plane which can fly around the world... The mission of scientists is great, which are derived from their perseverance and dedication. So I want to be a scientist.
To be a scientist is easier said than done. Because when scientists want to know a lot of knowledge, they must have the spirit of bear hardships. From now on, I will work hard, listen carefully in class, read more useful books after class, be not afraid of difficulties. Then I will be stronger.
If I become a scientist at last, I want to serve my great motherland with my wisdom, like Thomas Edison invented many useful things for his motherland. I also want to invent something, which can keep health and cure disease.
I hope my dream will come true