Question

英语作文修改。

How to relax ourselves after the exam
It is necessary to relax ourselves after the exam.But how can we relax ourselves?
First,we can travel.It's a good way to relax ourselves.We also can face the nature by travelling.For example,we can play with the fish,smell the flowers,hear the birds singing,etc.And we'll have a good rest after travelling.
Second,we can take part in some activities,such as listen to the music,watch a movie.We'll enjoy ourselves if we do that.
Third,do some exercise.It makes our body strong.
If so, we can stay healthy and enjoy life.

帮我修改修改。有什么语法错误或者是打的单词不对都可以说出来。也可以加一些内容。老师让我们打印出来的。谢谢。~

Answer 1

你的句子中主要是有许多不native(当地人的那种感觉）
下面是我帮你改的，但是还是参照了你的原文。对了，我改的是基于你的水平哈，不想它变得面目全非。
The way to relax ourself after exam(这里最好用名词，再加个从句） 你的句子其实也没错
it's necessary (for us)...........exam. (so) 注意，这里你这里没转折。........ourself.

firstly, we can travel(to relax ourselves), (which is the good way)如果你学了从句可以用。
because we can (get attached with natural environment.) 与大自然相交流不是face the nature。这有点中式英语

we can (fishing)不是play with fish, ................And we (can)前面用一般，后面也一般时态.......

(secondly),.........such as (listening to music) 应为你的东西修饰的是activity,所以，要用listening,如果不懂你可以去问老师。这叫非谓语动词做名词， 后面watch 也是一样的。

enjoy the time... 不是ourselves.....享受我们自己。。。。。听起有点不对哈。。。。

third,后面还行。

最后还行吧。

Answer 2

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