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14：28 A和B接到CCTV拷机，回电称一楼高压间烟雾报警。立即前往检查。两分钟后，A回电告知CCTV高压间发生火警，并通知总机一楼高压间火警发生，立即以火警程序展开。
14：33 总工程师、总经理、D,酒店消防员及保安部员工闻讯赶到火灾现场。
一分钟后，酒店总经理发布命令，火势无法控制，立即进行全酒店消防疏散。
酒店消防主管A接到总工程师的指示后，立即启动酒店疏散预案，进行消防大疏散，警铃和应急广播在全酒店范围内起作。消防疏散开始了。
于此同时，酒店消防员在队长B的指挥下，在预先安排的消防演习地点，“北部岗”展开水带铺设及设置水枪阵地。另外的消防队员手提灭火机待命。
根据预案，工程部员工C立即迫降S11-S14四辆员工电梯，片刻后四辆服务电梯全部降到一楼，电梯门全部打开。除了S14消防电梯用钥匙可以操作外，其余电梯都停止工作。
14：50酒店除工作原因得到部门经理同意留守工作岗位外，全部员工都被疏散到北部岗集合.
酒店消防队员及保安到疏散队伍前列队。
9. 14：55 有总经理宣布此次消防大疏散结束，各部门可以回到各自的工作岗位。同时对全酒店播放消防疏散结束通知。
此次大疏散的成功之处在于：
准备充分，在工程部总监的亲自监督下，我们就消防大疏散各个细节进行仔细的推敲，对参加消防疏散的工作人员进行了周密的安排。严格按照酒店的应急撤离程序进行人员的布置。消防泵房、发电机房我们都安排人员参与,分别是E和F.另外，根据工程部总监的指示，我们在5楼和22楼避难层也安排了工程部员工进行疏散撤离引导,分别是H和G。
在消防大疏散前，我们请了具有一级消防检测资质的检测公司对我们酒店的消防设施进行了消防检测，发现问题及时修理，使我们的设备处于正常状态。
各部门安排的消防疏散员在此次疏散中，能做好本职工作。
存在不足： 疏散演习结束后的人员统计很麻烦。各部门所交上的表格不统一，有的部门干脆只交张排班表，排班表示不能反映谁被疏散和谁被安排留守的。有的部门的疏散名单收不上来。还有有的部门在此次疏散中交上的疏散名单和实际存在的部门人员严重不符，而在疏散单上反映不出问题。

Answer 1

14:28 A and B received CCTV copy machine, called a floor call high smoke alarm. Immediately to check. After two minutes, A back to inform CCTV high fire, and to inform the operator a floor high fire, immediately to the fire process.
14:33 chief engineer and general manager, D, hotel fire and security staff rushed to the scene of the fire.
A minute later, the hotel general manager issued an order, the fire is not under control, immediate full hotel fire evacuation.
Hotel fire control director A received the chief engineer's instruction, immediately start Hotel evacuation, fire alarm and emergency evacuation of large, broadcast throughout the hotel within the scope of work. Fire evacuation began.
At the same time, the hotel fire in under the command of captain B, arranged in a fire drill sites, " North hillock " expansion hose laying and gun positions. Another firefighter portable fire extinguisher.
According to the plan, the engineering staff of C immediate landing S11-S14 four staff elevator, then four service elevators all fall to the floor, the elevator door opened. In addition to S14 fire elevator key operation, the remaining elevators stopped work.
14:50 hotel in addition to cause manager agreed to stay to work, all staff were evacuated to the north of the collection.
Hotel fire and security to the evacuation team before the parade.
The 9 14:55 general manager announced that the great fire evacuation ends, each sector can return to their work. At the same time to the hotel playing fire evacuation termination notice.
The evacuation of the success:
Ready, the director of engineering under the personal supervision of fire protection evacuation, we each detail careful scrutiny, to participate in the evacuation of the staff conducted a careful arrangement. In strict accordance with the hotel's emergency evacuation procedure personnel arrangement. Fire pump room, generator room we have arrangements for staff to participate in, respectively, E and F. in addition, according to the director of engineering instructions, we in the 5 floor and 22 floor of refuge layer are also arranged in the engineering staff were evacuated to guide, are H and G.
In the great fire evacuation, we invited with a fire detection qualified testing company to our hotel fire-prevention facilities for fire detection, found problems in a timely manner to repair, so that our equipment is at the normal state.
The Department's fire evacuation in the evacuation, can do a good job.
There is insufficient: evacuation after the end of the personnel statistics is very troublesome. Various departments make form are not unified, some departments simply make a schedule, schedule that does not reflect who were evacuated and who were scheduled to stay. Some departments of the evacuation list of cash out. There are some departments in the evacuation of the evacuation list and the actual presence of department staff seriously, and the evacuation order does not reflect problems.

Answer 2

晕啊，可能楼上的不是很了解消防，楼主的CCTV拷机的意思应该是CCTV监控室的电话的意思吧。我就看了第一段，两边的英文翻译都有问题。楼主最好把中文简化，你这样别人翻译不好。
我英语不怎么好，不乱翻译了