Question

帮我看下这篇英语作文有哪些错误

In the world,there are about three quanters of people love to listen to music. Listen to music is one of the most popular hobbiers,it is comenient and can make people comfortable.
I have fun listening to music I started listening to music since I was a 9-year-old girl .When I was in sad. I always listen to some gentle music ,it makes me calm .If you always listen to the classiccd music, then you would be a fascincunting person.I really enjoied listening to music ,so I belive in the future I will still listen to musci.
I love music,I have fun listening to music.Do you like it? 这篇作文有错吗 怎么修改？

Answer 1

there are about three quanters of people love。。这里不能直接用love，在love 前加个who好些。。

Listen to music is改成Listening..

it is comenient and can make people comfortable.这里前面写一个句号好些，要不就用and连接。。要不就用从句

I have fun listening to music没有这种表达

I have fun listening to music I started listening to music since I was a 9-year-old girl这一个句子里面有2个动词，这是不行的，你要么变成并列句，要么变成从句

When I was in sad. I always listen to some gentle music ,it makes me calm这一句改成

When I was in sad, I always listened to some gentle music which made me calm.
.I really enjoied listening to music ,so I belive in the future I will still listen to musci.这一句太别扭，建议换一种表达。。修饰一下

I love music,I have fun listening to music刚才的错误。。换表达

你写英文的思维要改变，这是中式英语。。。你可以看一部微电影，叫做 The Last...那个里面的表达是神级表达

追问

能把需要修改后的句子写下么。。

追答

上面我列出来的就是要修改的。。。
至于修改的办法我不能写给你，因为这样你的记忆不会深刻。。你得自己到网上去看看人家的表达方法，然后记下来，自己积累哦。。这样才能学好英语哈。加油哦

Answer 2

1、Listen to music is one of the most popular hobbiers,it is comenient and can make people comfortable.
——修改为：Listening to music is one of the most popular hobbiers,and it is comenient and can make people comfortable.
2、I have fun listening to music
——修改为：I have the fun of listening to music.
3、When I was in sad. I always listen to some gentle music ,it makes me calm
——修改为：When I was in sad, I always listened to some gentle music ,and it made me calm.
4、then you would be a fascincunting person.
——修改为：then you will be a fascincunting person.
5、so I belive in the future I will still listen to musci.

——修改为：so I belive that in the future I would still listen to musci.
6、I have fun listening to music.
——修改为：I have the fun of listening to music.

Answer 3

In the world,there are about three quanters of people loving to listen to music. Listening to music is one of the most popular hobbiers,and it is comenient and can make people comfortable.
I have fun in listening to music. I started listening to music since I was a 9-year-old girl .When I was sad, I always listen to some gentle music ,because it makes me calm .If you always listen to classic music, then you will be a fanscinating person.I really enjoy listening to music ,and I belive in the future I will still listen to music.
I love music,and I have fun listening to music.Do you like it?