Question

英语高手帮我看一下这句话有没有语法错误，谢谢

As individuals pay closer attention to travel abroad,an argument about the safety is appearing increasingly.
学艺不精，麻烦高手帮我看下这句话语法有没有错误，写作的时候这里面有没有哪些词可以用更好的话来替换，除了travel abroad 和safety 谢谢了！

Answer 1

语法倒没什么问题，但是表达方式和用词不够西式。我对句子的理解是越来越多人关注海外旅游，发生安全的纠纷也多了起来。不知理解对否？？

As people are getting more interested to travel abroad, there is an increasing number of safety
disputes.

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主要我是想用这种句式，关于我说的旅游，安全的问题是为了句式完全加上去的，谢谢了

Answer 2

As travelling abroad attracts more attention, there is growing concern about safety.

This would be more native.

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我是想用做开头在后面接上双方的观点，只是用句式，您看该怎么改？

Answer 3

As individuals are paying closer/more attention to travelling abroad,the arguments about the safety are arousing increasingly.
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谢谢了

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呵呵
做任务中

Answer 4

两个独立的主语，貌似没有什么语法错误，

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谢谢了