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希望有好心人能帮我改改鄙人的两篇拙文（英语作文），主要是语法啦，(*^__^*) 嘻嘻……O(∩_∩)O谢谢

Absently, it’s important to create a green campus. As for students, they would get a better class to learn、a better life and so on, if there is a green campus. As for adults or parents, create a green campus for children can avoid too taking care for them to hard working.
And, it’s clean that create a green campus not just make our campus green, but also make the learn windows green.
①：We should do something what well for create a green campus. Firstly, we will make more and more trees and flowers in our campus. It’s make our campus beautiful. Secondly, we should make rules about student’s learning to make sure they will hard working. Finally, we will hold many creational activities.
②：
How many kinds of Recreational Activities in the world. Nobody can answer the question, cause of Recreational Activities too many to math. Going to KTV、dancing、join a party and so on. All of them what kind make us happy.
Actually, mostly people loves join Recreational Activities. But, there is a uncommon view about it. Little people think Recreational Activities as a coin. They hold too many Recreational Activities can be harmful. I can't agree with them more. If you join some objected Recreational Activities, it’s good for your mood and healthy. However, not all Recreational Activities have advantages of them.
Maybe, most college students love Recreational Activities deeply. But, as a college student we should know what is the right、what is wrong……In my opinion, we can join some objected Recreational Activities sometimes. And most time we should study in school.

Answer 1

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Absolutely, it’s important to create a green campus. For students, they would get a better learning environment and a better life. For adults or parents, creating a green campus can help them take care of their children so that they can focus on working. And, it’s clear that creating a green campus will not just make our campus green, but also make the learning environment green.
①：We should do the following in order to create a green campus. Firstly, we should plant more trees and grow more flowers in our campus. It will make our campus beautiful. Secondly, we should set rules and regulations to make sure they will protect the environment. Lastly, we will organize many recreational activities.

②：How many kinds of recreational activities are there in the world? Nobody can answer this question because these activities are too many to count. Going to KTV, dancing, joining parties and so on are some examples of recreational activities. All of them make us happy.
Most people loves recreational activities, but there is still some people against it. Every coin has two sides. They believe that too many recreational activities can be harmful. I agree with them. Although some may be good for people's mood and health, not all recreational activities have advantages. Maybe, most college students love recreational activities very much. But, as college students, we should know what is the right and what is wrong. In my opinion, we can join some objected recreational activities, but most of the time we should study in school.

Answer 2

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