Question

基础很差，帮忙修改一篇英语作文，方便我能学习一些语法知识。谢谢

请根据下面提示写一篇短文简要介绍网络红人朱之文。 1. 一位勤劳、才华横溢的农民歌唱家轰动了全世界。 2. 由于出身贫寒他几乎没有受到正规的学校教育但是却对音乐十分痴迷。不论风雨严寒他总是在当地的小树林里、河堤上、田野中纵情歌唱。 3. 他心地善良扶危济困。对周围的动物情有独钟院子里的鸡、鹅成了他的忠实听众。 4. 他的毅力和决心终于有了回报继英国版的苏珊大妈之后他获得了中国“苏珊大叔”的称号。

There is a hard work peasant who is called Uncle Susan of China.Just like Aunt Susan ,his voick was so attractive that shocked the world.
Because of born to poor,he almost never recieved the education in ferular school.But he is so crazy in music.No matter windy,rainy or cold days.He always sings in local wood.
He always help the poor man with a kind heart.he has eyes only for the animals.The chicken and goose in the yard that to be the loyal audience of him.
.In return to his determination and perseverance,he is more and more popular now.

Answer 1

There is a hard work (hard work---hard-working)peasant who is called Uncle Susan of China.Just like Aunt Susan ,his voick was so attractive that (加上it) shocked the world.
Because of born to (of born poor---he was born)poor,he almost never recieved the education in ferular(ferular---regular) school.But he is so crazy in(in---about) music.No matter (加上what)windy,rainy or cold days.He always sings in local wood.
He always help (help---helps)the poor man with a kind heart(with a kind heart---heartedly).he has eyes only for the animals.(整个句子改为There are only animals in his eyes)The chicken and goose in the yard that to be the(that to be ---have become) loyal audience of him.
.In return to(to ---for) his determination and perseverance,he is more and more popular now.

追问

his voick was so attractive that (加上it) shocked the world.

请问这里为什么要加it
No matter (加上what)windy,rainy or cold days.He always sings in local wood.

请问这里为什么加what
The chicken and goose in the yard that to be the loyal audience of him.
这个句子错在哪

请问这篇文章如果字迹不怎么好看，30分能拿到多少分大概？

追答

that引导的是状语从句,一定要有主语的.所以加上it .
no matter后加上疑问词才能引导从句.因从句中的中心词是名词days所以用what 修饰.
The chicken and goose in the yard that to be the loyal audience of him这句结构不符合语法结构.that说不清它是引导词还是一代词,如果是引导词后应该有从句.你的没有,如果是代词句子也不需要这个意思.我猜想你是想说.他的眼中只有动物.所以这样改了一下.

追问

谢谢您，请问类似于：
that引导的是状语从句,一定要有主语的.所以加上it .

这样的加主语的情况还有哪些？能不能详细说明下。

追答

任何从句都是句子都要有主语.谓语.

追问

对不起 亲，我还是很迷糊
his voick was so attractive that (加上it) shocked the world.

这句里面的that不能充当主语吗？
你看
He is the young writer that has authored the book.

这个句子就是对的啊

追答

状语从句中的引导词不做成份,如
He is so tired that he can't walk on. 这里能把he去掉用that 来代替吗?一看这个你就会明白.

Answer 2

hard work---hard-working
voick ---voice
Because of born to poor--- Because of borning in a poor family
sings---sang
help---helped
poor---men
has---had
.he （ALSO）had eyes only for 【 animals】
既然是过去时 ，就应该都用过去式
我觉得 下面的改法不对 he has eyes only for the animals.(整个句子改为There are only animals in his eyes) 翻译不通

Answer 3

voick-voice he is so -was He always help -helps only for -also goose-geese

追问

您能不能帮忙整体改一改，或者说这篇文章有修改的余地吗？30分能拿到多少分呢？

追答

我觉得写得挺不错的啊,你要通过什么考试?

追问

是高考，我看了一下答案，写的那些词组和复杂句型我都不会。好象学过又没印象。我基础非常差，只能写到这种地步了。

追答

还好吧,多背点句型,常用的也会点就差不多了,改卷的时候没人会仔仔细细看的,都是看下开头,看下结尾,中间看看段落第一句话,再看看书写就给分了,注意这几个关键点就差不多了,别太紧张了,自信点,慢慢来,不还有好几个月么,一段时期进步一点点就可以了,加油吧