Question

求一篇英语作文（议论文）

针对现在的人越来越不重视东西本质上的意义，太注重外表和虚荣，例如去年中秋节出现的“天价”月饼，过节送礼选择送笔记本电脑、苹果手机等高档电子类产品，谈一下自己的看法。（要求大学本科作文的水平即可，字数在150左右）
满意的话会有更大的奖赏

Answer 1

It is a trend in China to by things look nice, especially when people decide to buy something as a gift for their friends. Doing so has automatically triggered a rapid development in packaging industry, but also caused a huge waste in our national resourses. A good example is buy a bag of Chinese tea, the tea itself may cost more than 500CNY but it includes nearly 200CNY for the package. Does it mean high quality when you buy a goods in a posh case, the answer is 'perhaps'. 'Perhaps' here means 50% of a chance to buy something realy good and another 50% of the chance is to buy something crap or faked.One of my friends bought a bottle of Maotai for 1800CNY, he was absolutely embarassed to find it to be water in it in front of his invited guests. It is crazy. Things have become so expensive and so well packed that many companies produce crap products play the same trick. We should criticize the manufacture that produce crap and fake goods, but those companies that charge their customers a large amount of money just for the package should be praised? No. As customers, we need to think about the question: why do we have to chase the superfacial things when we buy things? Why do we have to buy friends expensive gifts? Are a notebook computer, an I-phone and electronics really something we have to buy as gifts to someone? Can we not change our ways to show our love to your beloved ones just with an item suitable instead of telling them how much money it is worth? If we make a statistics in our population, it is easy to find out that 99% of the people would express their hatred for bribery and corrupted officials. However, how many of us have ever asked ourselves a question like 'What I have done in the past year that has promoted corruptions in our country?' (by ztlthb)

追问

首先辛苦你了，但是太长了，能不帮我精简一下，大概不超过180词，谢了

追答

I am just interested in your topic. It is hard to put it in fewer words.
I suggets that you let your teacher have a look first to see what you can do to make it shorter.
I could do you a shorter one but I don't have time for the moment. Can you revise it to make it shorter?