Question

请英语作文高手帮我改下这篇作文吧，有很多问题呢！能适当的加点内容就更好了，谢谢啦！

The government has arisen the retirement age recently , which provoked rigious debat in public. The issue is that should we arise the retirement age．Different people hold different opinion.
As far as I am concerned, we do need to arise retirement age. Firstly, our life expectancy is much longer as a result of the improvement in medical health care. Secondly, as we all know, the economic crisis highlighted the troubles facing pension plans worldwide. The government can not pay for it including china. Last but not least, our generation will lose lots of opportunities if the old occupy the oposition all the time. The retirement age do good to young generation as well as our social development. In a word, It is aright decision to arise the retirement age .

Answer 1

The government has raised the retirement age recently , which has provoked heated debate among people. The issue is if we should raise the retirement age．Different people hold different opinions.
As far as I am concerned, we do need to raise the retirement age. Firstly, our life expectancy is much longer than before as a result of the improvement in medical health care. Secondly, as we all know, the economic crisis has highlightended the troubles facing pension plans worldwide. The governments, including that of china, can not pay for it . Last but not least, our generation will lose lots of opportunities if the old occupy the positions all the time. The retirement age does good to the young generation as well as our social development. In a word, It is a right decision to raise the retirement age.
最后一条理由是硬伤，自己反驳自己的观点。

追问

为什么？我想表达的是提早退休年龄可以让年轻人有更多机会啊，The retirement age does good to the young generation as well as our social development.是不是这句要改下？要怎么改啊？

追答

可是你的观点是we do need to raise. 你赞成提高退休年龄！