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I am honored to be asked to speak at the closing ceremony from the one of the finest universities of korea.So far I have been in korea for fifteen days as a exchange student . although the exchange was very short I still learn a lot from life aboard.So I’d like to Thank you for contributing so much to the pleasure of our stay in korea.
Before I came to korea I have heard of kyung hee university as a world-famous comprehensive, research university. When I really come to kyung hee, join the campus I discovered more about him.In kyung hee university ,teachers quite dedicated to his student meanwhile students share the rights equally like masters. The university’s motto “Democratization of School,ideas and living”,as it said ,I found a outstanding campus make up of cultured professors and responsible students. kyung hee is also a university with beautiful environment.Neat street,unbelievable fresh air relax everyone in campus. When I take a walk in campus I even have a vision that I am walking in a garden.Unfortunately we come in the winter,kyung hee will be much more beautiful in spring right?
In the past fifteen days,we lived and studied together.We visited universities,practiced in hospital, learned advanced medical instruments and so on .Although the study task was exceeding heavy, we enjoyed the time with our excellent professors.Thanks for professors’selflessness teaching,we broadened our horizons and learned a lot .Besides study, During the period，I was also deeply infected by the Academic atmosphere and korean professionalism.Soon after I start work with koreans at school hospital I find koreans’work attitude is so hash that beyond my imagination.I was deeply shocked.To be honest korean professionalism and selflessness spirit inspired me with respect.
The effect of the exchange is seems to be far beyond our imagination .We benefit a lot from this valuable experience.Not only knowledge but also the spirit Finally thank you kyung hee university thank you my teachers.

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I am [much] honored [to be asked改为as invited] to speak at the closing ceremony [from the改为of] one of the finest universities [of改为in] Korea. So far I have been in Korea for fifteen days as an exchange student. Although the exchange was very short I still [learned] a lot from [life aboard改为it]. So I’d like to thank you for contributing so much to the pleasure of our stay in Korea.
Before [I came改为coming] to Korea I have heard of Kyung Hee University as a world-famous comprehensive, research university. When I [删除really] come to Kyung Hee by person, [删除join the campus] I discovered more about [him改为it]. In Kyung Hee University, [teachers改为professors are] quite dedicated to [his改为their] student while students share [the rights equally like masters改为equal right as the professors]. The university’s motto [is] “Democratization of School, ideas and living”[, as it said,删除]. I found an outstanding [campus make up of cultured professors and responsible students改为university is made by learned professors and hard-working students]. Kyung Hee is also a [university with beautiful environment改为beautiful university] with neat street and [unbelievable删除] fresh air [relax everyone in campus删除]. When I [take a删除] walk in [the] campus I [even have a vision that改为feel as if] I am walking in a garden. [Unfortunately改为It’s a regret that] we come in the winter, [I believe that] Kyung Hee [will改为must] be much more beautiful in spring, [right改为isn’t it]?
In the past fifteen days, we lived and studied together [with you]. We visited [other] universities, practiced in hospitals, learned advanced medical instruments and so on. Although the study task was [exceeding heavy改为extremely tough], we enjoyed the time with our excellent professors. Thanks for the selflessness teaching of all the professors, we broadened our horizons and learned a lot. Besides [the gains in] study, during the period, I was also deeply [infected改为moved] by the academic atmosphere and Korean professionalism. Soon after I start work with Koreans at school hospital I find Koreans’ work attitude is so [hash改为harsh?] that [beyond my imagination改为I can’t imagine]. I was deeply shocked. To be honest, [the] professionalism of Korean and the spirit of selflessness inspired me with respect.
The [effect改为result或outcome] of the exchange [is删除] seems to be far beyond our imagination .We [benefited] a lot from this valuable experience, not only in knowledge but also in spirit. Finally thank you Kyung Hee University! Thank you my professors and classmates!

I am much honored as invited to speak at the closing ceremony of one of the finest universities in Korea. So far I have been in Korea for fifteen days as an exchange student. Although the exchange was very short I still learned a lot from it. So I’d like to thank you for contributing so much to the pleasure of our stay in Korea.
Before coming to Korea I have heard of Kyung Hee University as a world-famous comprehensive, research university. When I come to Kyung Hee by person, I discovered more about it. In Kyung Hee University, professors are quite dedicated to their student while students share equal right as the professors. The university’s motto is “Democratization of School, ideas and living”. I found an outstanding university is made by learned professors and hard-working students. Kyung Hee is also a beautiful university with neat street and fresh air. When I walk in the campus I feel as if I am walking in a garden. It’s a regret that we come in the winter, I believe that Kyung Hee must be much more beautiful in spring, isn’t it?
In the past fifteen days, we lived and studied together with you. We visited other universities, practiced in hospitals, learned advanced medical instruments and so on. Although the study task was extremely tough, we enjoyed the time with our excellent professors. Thanks for the selflessness teaching of all the professors, we broadened our horizons and learned a lot. Besides the gains in study, during the period, I was also deeply moved by the academic atmosphere and Korean professionalism. Soon after I start work with Koreans at school hospital I find Koreans’ work attitude is so harsh that I can’t imagine. I was deeply shocked. To be honest, the professionalism of Korean and the spirit of selflessness inspired me with respect.
The result (或outcome) of the exchange seems to be far beyond our imagination .We benefited a lot from this valuable experience, not only in knowledge but also in spirit. Finally thank you Kyung Hee University! Thank you my professors and classmates!