Question

请帮忙看一下这段话有没有语法错误？改正下。谢谢。

So could I share my favorite movie with you in English? Every child love cartoons. I love the Disney best when I was a little boy. The lion King taught me how to be brave. Beauty and beast told me what is love. All of them are my friends and they show me an amazing world I have never imagined.
The Hollywood blockbuster, I think everyone loves it. Of course not except me. I still remember the word spoke by Reed In Shawshank “Some birds aren't meant to be cage, their feathers are just too bright.”. I think I am also a little bird, just waiting for the moment to fly higher and higher.
What is your favorite? Could you recommend a movie for me? It’s my pleasure to watch it.

Answer 1

很少一些错误。如果你是初一初二，还好。如果是高中，那你可要注意了。

So could I share my favorite movie with you in English? Every child loves_ cartoon. I love Disney the best when I was a little boy. The _Lion King taught me how to be brave. Beauty and Beast told me what love is_. All of them are my friends and they show me an amazing world I have never imagined.
There are Hollywood blockbusters, I think everyone loves them. Of course including me. I still remember the word spoken_ by Reed _in Shawshank Redemption “Some birds aren't meant to be caged_, their feathers are just too bright.”. I think I am also a little bird, just waiting for the moment to fly higher and higher.
What is your favorite? Could you recommend a movie for me? It will be my pleasure to watch it.

Answer 2

一楼sunskite的修改已经很完美啦~不再赘述。我就说下相关语法规则吧。

1.每个小孩都喜欢卡通，every child是单数，动词要用第三人称单数形式。
2.Lion King 电影名字要大写哦~（印在书上的一般都是斜体）这个小问题~
3.tell sb +从句 的时候 从句要使用正常语序，比如He told me what he wanted.他告诉我他想要什么。
4”.当然也包括我“这句话 用including更自然。
5 sb说的什么话 用。。spoken by sb。因为话和人是被动的关系。
6 Some birds aren't meant to be caged 同理 ，小鸟是”被“关在笼子里。
7 至于最后一句 It’s my pleasure to watch it.语法上并没有问题，但我们一般习惯说It will be my pleasure to watch it.毕竟”看电影“是还没有发生的事。

Answer 3

• So could I share my favorite movie with you in English? Every child loveS cartoons. I love the Disney best when I was a little boy. The lion King taught me how to be brave. Beauty and beast told me what  love IS. All of them are my friends and they show me an amazing world I have never imagined.
  The Hollywood blockbuster, I think everyone loves it. Of course not except me. I still remember the word spokeN by Reed In Shawshank “Some birds aren't meant to be cage, their feathers are just too bright.”. I think I am also a little bird, just waiting for the moment to fly higher and higher. 
  

  What is your favorite? Could you recommend a movie for me? It’s my pleasure to watch it.

• 个别大写的是需更正之处，其他挺好 ，恭喜你