Question

帮忙改一下这篇英语作文，谢谢了！我怕我的作文又要重写啊！不要留情~请指出我的错误。

重写当然更好啦，呵呵，我会很认真地看的。有两篇作文哦。谢谢大虾们^_^

Yesterdaywas the first day of new term and the weather was fine in the morning. Studentswere in the classroom early. They waited for a long time but the teacher did
not show. So they started to do something that they like. For example, Lily and
Tony cleaned the windows, two girls talked about their favorite singers, Penny
read a book. What about Lucy? She was drawing a picture. She is good at drawing.
Time passed quickly, the teacher came.

Wang Fei is a volunteer of the 2010 World Expo. Being a
volunteer was his dream when he was a child. Now it becomes true. He studies Englishvery hard. He was afraid to talk with foreigners in English a year ago. But now
he can do it! He led some foreigners visited Shanghai during May Day holiday. The
visitors took a lot of photos. They enjoyed themselves. Wang Fei was really agood volunteer.

Answer 1

Yesterdaywas, the first day of new term, and(and去掉) the weather was fine in the morning. Studentswere in the classroom early. They waited for a long time but the teacher did
not show (加上up). So they started to do something that they like. For example, Lily and
Tony cleaned the windows, two girls talked about their favorite singers, Penny
read a book. What about Lucy? She was drawing a picture. She is good at drawing.
Time passed quickly, the teacher came.

Wang Fei is a volunteer of the 2010 World Expo. Being(改为to be） a
volunteer was his dream when he was a child. Now it becomes （comes）true. He studies Englishvery hard. He was afraid to talk with foreigners in English a year ago. But now
he can do it! He led some foreigners visited (visit)Shanghai during May Day holiday. The
visitors took a lot of photos. They enjoyed themselves. Wang Fei was really agood volunteer

Answer 2

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