Question

求帮忙，请教各位懂这方面的人，请帮忙看一下这个英语作文有什么问题没有，我在这里谢谢了

MY happy time during my winter vacation
I had a good time during my winter vacation.My grandfather lived in a small mountain village,so I went to call on them in the winter vacation.That village is very small,but I could breathe fresh air and smell the sweet flowers,there.We ate water dumplings every day.They tasted delicious.In the evening I watched TV with my family.I had a happy time there!
That was my happy time during the winter vacation.
MY happy time during my winter vacation
During my winter vacations,l was happy.My grandparents lived in a small village,so l went to visit them during my winter holidays.That villge was very small.l could breathe fresh air and smell flowers.I ate dumplings every day,they were delicious.At night,my family and l watched TV together.l enjoyed myself there。
这篇有问题吗?

Answer 1

你真棒, 写得非常好!

只有一点点小错误,

就是: My grandfather lived in a small mountain village.

这句话最好用一般现在时态来表示一个客观事实.

你用的一般过去时,说明他过去住在那儿,难道他现在不住那儿了吗?

所以建议将lived 改成: lives .

另外,call on them 应改为call on him.

因为你前面用的主语是My grandfather , 因此这儿应用him来指代My grandfather .

当然, 你也可以不改call on them ,而将前面的My grandfather 改成My grandparents, 这样也是可以的.

最后, 将flowers,there之间的逗号去掉就可以了.

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MY happy time during my winter vacation
During my winter vacations,l was happy.My grandparents lived in a small village,so l went to visit them during my winter holidays.That villge was very small.l could breathe fresh air and smell flowers.I ate dumplings every day,they were delicious.At night,my family and l watched TV together.l enjoyed myself there.

追答

直接给你改正后的全文吧, 这样回答起来更快一点:

MY happy time during my winter vacation

During my winter [vacations--vacation],l was happy.My grandparents [lived--lives] in a small village,

so l went to visit them during my winter holidays. That villge was very small.l could breathe fresh air

and smell [原文中的the sweet最好不要去掉] flowers. I ate dumplings every day, [并列句,要加上and]

they were delicious. At night,my family and l watched TV together. l enjoyed myself there.

追问

我说的是这篇帮忙改下，谢谢

追答

我已经改了嘛, 那就不加[原文中的the sweet最好不要去掉] 这个了, [lived--live], 其它见上面改的.

追问

[并列句,要加上and]
是在哪里加

追答

在they were delicious这句前面加and.

好,我现在把重新改过的全文给出来:

MY happy time during my winter vacation

During my winter vacation, l was happy. My grandparents live in a small village, so l went to visit

them during my winter holidays. That villge is very small, but l could breathe fresh air and smell

flowers. I ate dumplings every day, and they were delicious. At night, my family and l watched

TV together. l enjoyed myself there.

追问

我想让这篇作文最后加一句‘这就是我寒假的快乐时光’这句话，麻烦了

追答

你上面不是有吗? 就用那句就可以了: That was my happy time during the winter vacation.

Answer 2

1)call on 改成visit
2)That village is very small,but I could breathe fresh air and smell the sweet flowers,there. 这句话there前面的逗号是不需要的哦
3)They tasted delicious 直接写they were delicious

然后基本就没什么问题了

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MY happy time during my winter vacation
During my winter vacations,l was happy.My grandparents lived in a small village,so l went to visit them during my winter holidays.That villge was very small.l could breathe fresh air and smell flowers.I ate dumplings every day,they were delicious.At night,my family and l watched TV together.l enjoyed myself there.

追答

During my winter vacations 改成During my winter vacation ，My grandparents lived in a small village 这里的时态不对，你祖父母是一直住在小村庄里面的，所以应该还是用一般现在时

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能具体写出来一下吗

追答

My grandparents live in a small village 这样就可以