请大家帮我修改一下英语作文 : The hero in my eyes
作文一共20分，请问我能得几分，语法上有错误吗 展开
修改后作文如下，基本没有语法错误，几个单词拼写错误。
In my opinion, a policeman is the hero in my eyes. In fact policemen can be seen everywhere. They catch thieves as well as keep our cities safe.
In other words, we can't live without them. If people lose something, a policeman will try to find it for them.
If people need any help, a policeman will try to give them a hand. How great a policeman is! I should learn from them how to be a warm-hearted person.
翻译
在我看来，警察是我心目中的英雄。事实上，到处都可以看到警察。他们既能抓小偷，又能保证我们城市的安全。
换句话说，我们不能没有他们。如果人们丢了什么东西，警察会设法帮他们找。
如果人们需要帮助，警察会尽力帮助他们。警察是多么伟大啊！我应该向他们学习如何做一个热心人。
In my opinion,a policeman is the hero in my eyes.
In my opinion,a policeman can be regarded as a hero.
A policeman is the hero in my eyes.
(you don't need both 'In my opinion' and 'in my eyes'. They are repeat as have the same meaning.)
In fect,policemen can be seen here ang there.
In fact, policemen can be seen in many places where their presences are needed.
They catch thieves as well as keep our city safe.
They spot and catch criminals and provide safe guard to us to as keep our city safe.
(thieves are not the worst people to our society.)
In other words,we can't live without them.
In other words, we can't enjoy a peaceful life without policemen.
If people lost something,a policeman will try to find it.
(this is not very true, it depends on what lost as policemen are to busy to look for everything people lost)
If people need any help,a policeman will try to give them a hand.
(I don't think so. This is a weak point to support your opinion)
How great a policeman is!
I should learn from them to be a warm-hearted person.
I should learn from them and try to be a warm-hearted person.
稍微改动下，第一句用了In my opinion 就不要用in my eyes，只要其一；第二，警察抓贼保护市民安全，保卫城市的则是安宁。
In my opinion, a policeman is the hero in my eyes. In fact policemen can be seen everywhere. They catch thieves as well as keep our cities safe. In other words, we can't live without them. If people lose something, a policeman will try to find it for them. If people need any help, a policeman will try to give them a hand. How great a policeman is! I should learn from them how to be a warm-hearted person.
In fact,the policemen can be seen anywhere.
Their mission is to serve the people, to defend the city and (to) maintain order.
In the other words,we can't live well without them.
If people lost things ,the policemen would have tried their best to find them .
Whenever people need help, the policemen will try to give them a hand.
How great the policemen is!
I think that each of us should learn from them to be a warm-hearted person.
