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麻烦各位帮忙改一篇英语作文，谢谢了。

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题目：My. Hometown
提示：1.我的家乡是中国的首都北京。
2.北京是一座美丽的城市，天安门,故宫位于北京的中心。
3.北京有很多名胜古迹，如天坛（the Temple of Heaven）,颐和园（the Summer Palace）和北海公园等。
4北京还有很多购物中心。
5.每年都有很多游客到北京观光旅游。我爱我的家乡。
My Hometown
My hometown is Beijing, the capital of China. Beijing is a beautiful city .The Tian An Men in the centre of Beijing. Beijing has a lot of （名胜古迹不会写）.Such as, the Temple of Heaven, the Summer Palace and the Beihai park. Beijing has a lot of the centre of shopping. There are many visitors go sightseeing to Beijing and treval.
I love my hometown very much.
welcome to my hometown.

Answer 1

改动后的：
My hometown is Beijing, the capital of China. Beijing is a beautiful city .The Tian An Men is in the center（centre，英式拼写） of Beijing. Beijing has a lot of historic places, such as the Temple of Heaven, the Summer Palace and the Beihai park. In addition, Beijing has a lot of shopping malls/centers. Every year, many travelers take sightseeing tours in Beijing. （这里要用there be句型吗？用的话是： there are many travelers taking sightseeing tours in Beijing).
I love my hometown very much.
Welcome to my hometown.
你的原文写的很不错呢~

Answer 2

1.The Tian An Men in the .... 改成Tian An Men Square is in the centre....
2.Beijing has a lot of the centre of shopping 改成 Beijing has a lot of shopping centres
3.There are many visitors go sightseeing to Beijing and treval 改成 There are many visitors go sightseeing and traveling to Beijing.....