Question

能帮我改一下吗？ 并解释下为什么那样改。谢谢。

短文改错Have you ever heard from the saying:All work and no 1.
play make Jack a dull boy?What this means is that if you 2.
study all the times you will become a boring person.You 3.
must go out and having fun with your friends,otherwise 4.
you will lose him.No one wants to be friends with the 5.
person who that only works and studies.Perhaps you have 6.
a confidence problem.Please try remember that the work 7.
you do is for yourself rather than for anyone else.You do 8.
not have to compete your classmates.No one can be 9.
happier in studying seven days and seven nights a week. 10

Answer 1

study all the times3.

times改time因为时间不可数

.You 3.
must go out and having fun with your friends,otherwise 4.
you will lose him.

him改them因为你先前用的friends是复数,him是单数（他）

No one wants to be friends with the 5.
person who that only works and studies.

the person改a person.
没有人会想和一个只会工作和读书的人在一起。
用the person很奇怪,会有"那个...人"而非“一个...人”的意思。

Perhaps you have 6.
a confidence problem.

可改成 Perhaps you are not confident, 更简洁,表达的意思也一样

Please try remember that the work 7.

在这里要用 Please try to, “try to”要连在一起

You do 8.
not have to compete your classmates.

应是,compete with, “complete with”要连在一起

No one can be 9.
happier in studying seven days and seven nights a week. 10

No one can be happy if they study twenty-four hours, seven days a week.
恩,seven days and seven nights a week我懂你想用夸饰法，可读起来怪怪的,这个解释不出来,囧

以上,希望有帮助！