Question

求教改错。

My dog Ben.died last year.I miss her very much and I well never forget what happened with him when I was eight years old. Ben doesn't like my father.One day my father called at Ben but he ran into garden.My father shouted at Ben,but the more he shouted,the much Ben ran away.In the end,my father ran after Ben around the garden but even tired to jump on him.I watched this,laughing very much that my stomach hurting.Although it happened a long time before,I will never forget the day in which he made my father so mad and me so happy.
这篇你已经改过了对吗？麻烦再看一遍。这是正常的语序。然后我总感觉I watched this,laughing very much that my stomach hurting.这句话有错。但是我不知道怎么改。是不是把very改成so？so...that...这样子？

Answer 1

文中还有许多错误: 括号中横线前为错词,横线后为改正后的词.

是的,你说得对,要把very改成so.

so...that...是固定结构, that引导结果状语从句,

that前的部分表示引起某种结果的原因.

My dog Ben died last year.I miss【her--him】very much and I 【well--will】 never forget what happened 【with--to】 him when I was eight years old. Ben 【doesn't--didn't】 like my father.One day my father called【去掉at】 Ben but he ran into 【加上the】garden.My father shouted at Ben,but the more he shouted,the【much--more】Ben ran away.In the end,my father ran after Ben around the garden【 but--and】 even 【tired--tried】 to jump on him.I watched this,laughing【very--so】 much that my stomach 【hurting--hurt】.Although it happened a long time 【before--ago】,I will never forget the day
【in--on】 which he made my father so mad and me so happy.