Question

初一英语纠错

We often say that the earth is our homeland and human society comes from nature. Therefore, I think our society is a part of nature. People should live harmoniously with nature. All the materials we need to live with come from nature, but we should also repay the nature, rather than blindly solicit. For example, we should plant more trees and take actions to protect the environment. In addition, we have to control population. Due to excessive population growth, human beings require much more natural resources than before, which lead to excessive pressure on nature. In order to long-term development, the population growth must be controlled. We all come from nature which is our homeland, so we must try best to protect it.
帮我找几个重点（重点就是要有语法的）单词和句子。

Answer 1

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• 正确答案是：

We often say that the earth is our homeland and human society comes from nature. Therefore, I think our society is a part of nature. People should live harmoniously with nature. All the materials we need to live with come from nature, but we should also repay the nature, rather than blindly solicit. For example, we should plant more trees and take actions to protect the environment. In addition, we have to control population. Due to excessive population growth, human beings require much more natural resources than before, which 【leads】 to excessive pressure on nature. In order to 【have a】 long-term development, the population growth must be controlled. We all come from nature which is our homeland, so we must try 【 our】best to protect it.

【修改原因】：

1、 which 引导非限制性定语从句，指代 human beings require much more natural resources than before 这一件事情，用单数leads。

2、 没有In order to sth的表达，只有 in order to do sth 的表达。

3、 try one's best to do 尽一切努力做...

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追问

for examle用不用改成such as

追答

其实没什么错误，都是举例的，但是感觉 such as 自然些、流畅些，可以改，也可以不改。

追问

帮我找几个重点（重点就是要有语法的）单词和句子。

追答

重点，这篇文章的？还是什么？

追问

这篇文章的

追答

1、 should do ....rather than do 应该做...而不是...
2、take actions to do 采取行动做...
3、due to = because of = on account of = owing to 由于
4、 try one's best to do 尽某人所能做
5、 live harmoniously with 和...和谐相处
其实并未含有很多特别难的语法，主要是句式好。

Answer 2

这是初一的水平!!!真心败了。。。。
最后两句Due to excessive population growth, human beings require much more natural resources than before, which lead（s） to excessive pressure on nature.
（In order to long-term development, the population growth must be controlled. We all come from nature which is our homeland, so we must try best to protect it.）这一句问题大点。
首先In order to后面要接动词，然后后面We all come from nature which is our homeland表达太过中式，最后we must try （our） best。
建议改为Take the long-term development into consideration, the population is supposed to be under the government's control. All in all, the Earth is the motherland of all our human beings, its our duty to make our every effort to better it .

All the materials we need to live with come from nature。。。这里是一个定语从句
Due to excessive population growth, human beings require much more natural resources than before, which lead to excessive pressure on nature。。。这是非限定性定语从句

Answer 3

倒数第三句“lead”加“s",最后一句“try”后面加“our"
语法错误不多，但是有一种中国式英语的感觉，还有改进余地

Answer 4

earth改成Earth

Answer 5

把for examle改成such as