Question

我写了一篇英语文章，初一的，看一下有无语法错误？？不包括大小写，并加以改进。。

（莫笑）i really hope that you can have a visit to shenzhen.shenzhen is a very beautiful city in the south of china.if you like shopping,there are many shopping malls here,you can enjoy yourself.ther are also have many plaves of interest such as the window of the world and the happy valley .you can visit shenzhen with your friends,that you can mke fun of them .have a good time!

Answer 1

.if you like shopping,it is a good place for you; there are many shopping malls there,so that you can enjoy yourself.ther are also many places of interest such as the window of the world and the happy valley .you can visit shenzhen with your friends,and that will bring more happiness to you. .

追答

很开心能为你尽我绵薄之力

Answer 2

south of china→southern China,shopping malls here,→here可以删掉，逗号改句号，there are also have→have可以删掉，that you can make fun of them→so that you can have fun with them