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英语文章求用高级句子修改

3.1 Our ecosystem and the wildlife
3.1.1 Protecting our ecosystem.
With the development of the industry and agriculture, the environment problems become more and more serious all over the world.Trees on the hills have been cut down and waste water is being pouredcontinuously into rivers. Cars make great noises and give off poisonous gas.
Fromthis Figure it can be seen that most of people thought our ecosystem wasdestroyed. They believe the earthquakes and floods happen frequently due tohuman destroyed our ecosystem balance. Someone thought that we were in goodcondition, so, they were against it. Another 20% of the respondents had not clearidea, not only could they see positive effect, but they also could see thenegative part.
Thereare some suggestions to protect our ecosystem.
1. New laws must be passedto place strict control over industrial pollution.
2. The public must receivethe education about the hazard of pollution
3. As a civilizer, we havea duty to protect our ecosystem. So we should do something we can do to protectit
In my opinion, the earth is our home andwe have the duty to take care of it for ourselves and for our latergenerations. I hope the problem will be solved in the near future and our homewill become better and better.

Answer 1

建议你做以下的修改：

3.1 Our (E)cosystem and the (W)ildlife (标题： 需要大写)

With (increased)development of the industry and agriculture, the environment(al) problems (have) become more and more serious all over the world. Everyday, trees are being cut down, waste water is being poured into rivers, and cars are making a lot of noises and producing poisonous gas into the air. (还需要一， 二句话来阐述生态与大自然的关系，作为总结以下要讨论的观点。)
3.1.1 Protecting Our Ecosystem (建议你用斜体字)
As illustrated in the following Figure, when asked about the question...., a great majority of the respondents (提供%) thought that our ecosystem had been destroyed. They believed that the earthquakes and floods happened so frequently nowadays could be largely attributable to the destruction of the balance of ecosystem by humans. On the contrary, a small number the respondents (提供%) disagreed and thought that our ecosystem and wildlife were in good condition. Another 20% of the respondents had no clear-cut opinion about this issue. They recognized both the positive and negative sides of the problems.
There are several suggestions to protect our ecosystem:
1. New laws must be passed to place strict control over industrial pollution;
2. The public must receive education about the hazard of pollution; and
3. As a civilized citizen, we have a duty to protect our ecosystem.

What should we do to protect our ecosystem? In my opinion, the earth is our home and we have the obligation to take care of it, not just for ourselves but also for our later generations. I hope the problem will be solved in the near future and our earth will become a better and better place to live.

希望对你有帮助。