Question

写了一篇英语作文，求检查修改语法错误，谢谢！

My mom is 33 years old. She is the most beautiful woman in the world in my heart.
My mom is very patient.When I failed in the exam,she won’t get angry.She always help me and find the cause of the error.But sometimes I tired of her,because she always chatter about every little thing.I know she is all good for me.At this time,I want to tell my mom “thank you for your love,I love you forever!”
I love my mom and I’m sure she is the best mom in the world.

Answer 1

When I fail后面用的都是一般现在时，这里最好也用表示状态，不表过去

追问

won也要改成will 对吧

追答

不是的，他不会生气，用否定won't

追问

刚刚脑袋短路了。。还有其他错误吗？

Answer 2

IF I fail 不是when chats不是chatter 也许可以再改一下倒数第二句和倒数第三句不怎么连贯。

Answer 3

She won't get angry改为She would not get angry
At this time 改为At that time更好

Answer 4

I Love my mum